Ah, great story but poor me, being held captive with an over active beast at my feet and the author(may sanders-stokes) keeping watch close-by. However, it was a great attempt at writing a story and a good story at that.

Ps. i wrote this on by my own will *moves away from gun at my temple*

Okay, from the aspect of language, this was fantastic. The only thing that stops this from being on top is that it fails to convey the pain in his life. There's too much talking.

Being an identical twin myself, I didn't find it all all a bit slashy. I understand what it would be like if my twin died. It would be... It would be torture. Complete, utter torture. I don't know how I would go on if my twin died. It would be like half of me has just disappeared.

Nicely done. :)