Reviews for The Vampyre's Daughter
Guest chapter 15 . 3/9/2014
Please update!
Cat chapter 7 . 6/18/2013
Hahahahaha ur right. J.B. does suck... Magorly
Cat chapter 3 . 6/18/2013
Erin went evil during destined, Shaylin took her spot
FantsyandStevieRae'sBiggestFan chapter 15 . 5/14/2013
i like the inside Adrian's head, but i don't think Krim should stay. as much as it's awesome she's there, that might be a little too far with that. as for his power's, he's kind of like, Light himself. so i don't think it's too much. and i feel like Allie is going to have something on her forehead now. Some sort of Mark. so yeah, it was amazing! :) loved it!
ine NicAoibh chapter 15 . 4/17/2013
This chapter amazing! I can't believe Allie was powers :D I don't think Krimson should stay. Not because I don't like her but because I think It would add to the turmoil of Kalie. So when the really bad stuff happens she feels alone and then she can realises something and comes back stronger. At least that's what I think. I like how you can see inside different people's heads although I don't think you should do it very often with Adrian, just to make him more unpredictable and in turn, more intimidating and threatening.
I think you should tie Gabriel in a bit more, I take it you named him after Gabriel from "Heroes" because you said you watched it, so maybe you could let that influence you a bit more. Maybe he could be Allie's protector yet he doesn't get on while with the others, especially Kalie. Which then would led to seeing more instead his head, giving more of a rounded perception on the story and what's going on.
Another point is that I think Kalie should spend a bit more time with the Black Bull and the sword, getting to know her strengths, which could frighten her. Also I think she should react more to the whole on coming battle, but not in a straight "Oh no, I'm scared because there's going to be a battle" but in a very subtle way which is something I loved about in the original H.o.N books.
My final point is more of a question, what did the Black Bull mean about Allie protecting Kalie and her being Marked three months before she was? I don't get it, was Kalie not marked in a hospital when Allie was born? I just need a bit of clarification :D Although this is my first review so I don't really know if you can reply this but a while, what can you do?
I just thought I'd let you know I'm a huge fan of this book and that I'm from Ireland :D so there you go you have a fan half way across the world 33 Hope this makes you feel proud!
wolfgirl336699 chapter 15 . 4/16/2013
Lol I wish I could see Taylor Swift but alas I cannot... Oh well that has nothing to do with this story, I absolutly love the Black Bull he is so cool and I want to see more of Gabriel! So please Update again soon!
Aquagirl64 chapter 15 . 4/15/2013
Yay you updated! I think that krim should stay but I think that only kalie and maybe Allie should be able to see her.
Cara Meirfert chapter 14 . 4/10/2013
Wow...awesome story
Silverleaf of Thunderclan chapter 14 . 4/9/2013
I like this chapter! Idk if there r ghosts in hon but I think kalie really needed Krim to give her that push in the right direction. Now you can get on with the story cuz it was dragging a little before but it sounds like it will pick up soon! Please update this story soon! I really like this story!
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 14 . 3/12/2013
Amazing chapter! Okay... sorry, but I don't really remember this story. I tell you what though, when you get another chapter up I'll re-read this so I remember what it's about. I think the ghost thing is good though. It's different from the series, so it shows that Nyx hasn't already done everything in her power.
keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXX
FantsyandStevieRae'sBiggestFan chapter 14 . 3/8/2013
I don't think you broke a rule... I considered that at first but, well it is your story. You can't break a rule you didn't make. I'm glad she knows before she gets killed or something. I'm really looking forward to what happens next. Awesome chapter! :)
inquiete chapter 14 . 3/5/2013
Interesting, so now she finally knows, well that should make for an awkward scene now shouldn't it.
Creager chapter 14 . 3/4/2013
Yay! It's totally not cheating to have ghosts! (Having extra Gods is probably cheating though...) You've inspired me to update something too! Yay again! But only Kallie should've been able to see her, then she could walk around looking crazy as she talked to her.
DesertDarkfire chapter 14 . 3/4/2013
I love it, my dear!
dragon fier 20 chapter 13 . 2/14/2013
hmm, where as nikky? i still loved the chapter, and i really can't wait for more! plz update this one and foreseen soon!
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