|Reviews for Cup glory|
| Hawki chapter 1 . 8/19/2013
-“Shaking his head clear, he grabbed the cup and was suddenly pulled away as the portkey drags him away.”
Cut out “clear,” “drags” should be “dragged.”
-"I am sure that we will find another way Master." Nagini hissed.
Should be a comma after “Master” instead of a full stop.
-Concerning the piece as a whole, I do like the concept. The problem however, is its length. I’m used to this length of story from you, but here, it really does feel like too little. We’re given a single line of text to convey Krum’s arrival and subsequent death, a brief bit of dialogue, then passive narrative just relating to us what happens afterwards. Not bad per se, but I’m afraid this feels like the bare bones of a oneshot than a whole one.
| xabandonedaccountx chapter 1 . 4/15/2011
Really good and kind of empowering in so few words, or maybe thats just me.
| Laura Scofield chapter 1 . 4/14/2011
Ooh, this was a very unsettling "What If" scenario, I hadn't really considered what would happen if it had been Krum or Fleur who got to the Portkey/Cup first... I liked how this was short, it made it all the more impacting, and now has got me thinking of lots of other possible "What If" cases for the HP books! :)