Reviews for Naruto Avatar Of Tzeentch
555814 chapter 7 . 3/8/2014
345 please would you kindly
Anon jt chapter 7 . 2/28/2014
3 2 rewrite the story first but leave this version up until you have gotten to this point of the story if the other one then delete this version
Rain Shigu chapter 1 . 1/26/2014
There is no punctuation.
Guest chapter 7 . 2/26/2013
keep the story and rewrite it and invest more effort
SeigZeon chapter 7 . 8/3/2012
3
gster391 chapter 2 . 8/2/2012
It's not a bad premise, the only thing is, I can't read it. You need to use quotation marks to show where people start talking in the first chapter and most of this one; while I could probably puzzle through it with enough time and motivation, there's no point in doing that with so many other stories ou there. That said, clean up your writing and I'll love you for it. Practically no one writes a good WH40k crossover.
AnAddictedReader chapter 3 . 8/1/2012
While this story is interesting, there is a lack of spacing and to me, it looks like huge blocks of words.
OnlineImhotep chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
Holy shit dude, you should redo this and have actual punctuation.
Remember that you need paragraphs after each time someone speaks, and each time that you change topics.
Also, this would be much easier to read if you keep the text on the right instead of centered.
blood enraged chapter 1 . 7/31/2012
your writing style is a nightmare. learn grammer, not just periods or quotations, but the entire english facking language, learn grammer, get a beta, i dont care just dont write again until one of those conditions are met
firelordeg chapter 7 . 7/30/2012
i think you should rewrite this as well as the sequel
Kharneth666 chapter 7 . 7/30/2012
rewrite or keep going.
Exturiel chapter 1 . 7/28/2012
I actually got a headache trying to read this.
Something constructive: quotation marks are your friend.
Ophidias chapter 1 . 3/17/2012
i didn't get past the first paragraph. lean what a full stop is please, or a period if you happen to be American.
Tzeentch chapter 6 . 2/14/2012
This story leaves me displeased
Emma chapter 1 . 1/16/2012
This hurt to read. I hope you are a child because it would be truly sad if this is the work of an adult.
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