|Reviews for Return to the Underworld|
| theuone chapter 12 . 6/24/2014
this is an excellent story, in fact I feel it could even be canon-worthy. yup, I think it could very well be canon, that's how well this was done.
| LeviathanTamer chapter 11 . 4/24/2014
Heh you're actually pretty close to the amount of words in Silverwing. That is if we go by standard spacing and words. Short by just 10,000 words. But then again I could care less. This is a good FanFiction and it helped set my mind at ease for what happened at the end of Firewing. Thank you.
| Guest chapter 12 . 2/3/2013
This ends just like the first Silverwing.
| Ilovesilverwing chapter 12 . 11/25/2012
Wow I think you just made the nexts book in the silverwing book XD wow oh and Apollo is dusk from darkwing... clever!the best what is to be the the next book in the silverwings books ever
| taco man chapter 1 . 4/5/2012
finally found a decent story plz update if u read this
| SparrowKeeper chapter 1 . 1/11/2012
I love it. Firewing was rather inconclusive, so this is the perfect sequel to the book. You are a gifted author!
| Scienza chapter 5 . 5/8/2011
That wasone of the best chapter's in any fanfic that I have ever read. Iloved the emotional confrotation between Marina and her former family . You are a literary master.
| flippinUrtables chapter 12 . 4/18/2011
This story was overall pretty good. I especially like the plot.
| john4096 chapter 12 . 4/17/2011
Wow, there was a lot going on in that story. I'm impressed that you managed to keep everything straight and wrap up all of the loose ends. It must've taken a lot of dedication to write such a complicated story.
There are some parts that I feel were a little quick or rushed, something that I've fallen victim to many times myself. It was never so bad as to be confusing, but sometimes the explanations were never entirely clear. I also feel that certain people were somewhat out of character at times.
However, the characters were kept believable for the majority of it, and I was pleasantly surprised to see so many minor characters make appearances. Granted, having to keep track of such a large number of storylines could potentially be overwhelming for some readers; but I feel that this story succeeded in being refreshingly creative.
Though I felt that some areas lacked proper descriptions, most f the story was very well illustrated and very close to they way Kenneth Oppel approaches the setting. You also have a very good grasp of grammar and mechanics, which I've found to be rare among fan fictions.
What I would suggest in any future revisions or new stories is to be careful with explanations, and resist the uge to rush plot events. It seems that, at times, the sheer volume of ideas you were trying to work out made it difficult for you to slow down and ensure that each was eloquently executed.
Another area of mild improvement is the dialogue. Again, you've done an exceedingly good job of keeping the dialogue believable and true to the invovled characters; but like the descriptions, I feel that there are some areas that are just a litle less effective than I feel-from the rest of your writing-that you are capable of acheiving.
Altogether, though, these are relatively small problems that I noticed while reading. I hope that this can help you improve your already considerable skill, because I feel that you have great potential as a writer.
All in all, it was a great story. I never felt that you were rambling or that the plot didn't make sense. I was genuinely caught by surprise a few times, and these twists were integrated into the story line without sacrificing the story's overall flow. Marina finding her old colony again, for example, was a brilliant idea, and I'm jealous that I never thught of it myself.
I'll admit that I disagreed with your approaches at some points. They way Marina and her parents get along, to use the same example, does not quite mesh with what I would have imagined. However, I think that's part of the fun in reading another writer's work.
So, to conclude, I am very pleased overall with this story, and would like to see more. I would encourage you to read through this one again and consider my suggestions, although I'm by no means an authority on the subject. Take what you will from my review, and whatever you do: keep writing!