|Reviews for Dawn Of The Dimensional Empire!|
| goddragonking chapter 1 . 4/26/2014
great chapter , Keep the good writing and hope for more updates soon
| Boostercc chapter 16 . 4/5/2014
When's chapter 17 getting uploaded?
| Kmon13 chapter 16 . 8/24/2013
Boy this series is quiet interesting not only has the main character taken things into account on who can and couldn't be of use but he's also kept in mind who would become a threat to him...
however I'm surprised with all the characters you've found or converted so far that you haven't taken into account of showing the Alien Race's (who kidnapped your Main character and his sister) home universe yet or showing that they're aware of David's actions yet or show plans how to counter them. (Since they like hopping into other universes to abduct other species I figured the first one should be something they feel could be easily controlled like the Jem'hadar ST deep space 9 or the Clone Troopers of the star wars universe...) since I don't think creatures of that type arent ones for being aware too long.
But those are only suggestions I know school and work are important and it been only three years since your last post but I figured I would at least offer a few options if you had writters block. (I've have it myself)
I've also kept an eye on your other works too and figured I would say hello.
So with that Ieave you with things to think about and and thank you for writing such good works
| Driger117 chapter 16 . 7/27/2013
FEED ME MORE
| rainman19 chapter 5 . 3/31/2013
power is going to your head. this is going in the exact opposite direction I thought.
| rainman19 chapter 2 . 3/31/2013
Going a little renegade here?
| Guest chapter 4 . 8/16/2012
"All in good time my dear. Once I make you my Queen power shall be returned to you." I said giving her a kiss." I gagged there
Seriously noone talks that way even gary stu.
| voidblade6 chapter 12 . 8/16/2012
I feel like I am reading someones personal fantasy and it is creepy. Anyways nice story.
| voidblade6 chapter 10 . 8/16/2012
. I also want you to get me intel on the daily habits of the Turian counselor." pervert much?
| voidblade6 chapter 9 . 8/16/2012
I wanted to say this before but I forgot... You SPACED Moka into the sun overkill much?
| voidblade6 chapter 6 . 8/16/2012
Oh of course he is alice he is gary god damn stu. I like the story by the way after all if I didn't I probably wouldn't even read it.
| voidblade6 chapter 5 . 8/16/2012
Demon lords of the hells why does he call girls my dear. Seriously that is so freaking creepy. If you call girls that in real life ... You would get thrown in prison or a loony bin.
| Selias chapter 16 . 8/14/2012
Fun to read, but it seems kind of rushed.
| gster391 chapter 16 . 8/7/2012
I like the story, but I feel like you might not be taking it in a realistic...ok, a normal...a...You know what, I don't feel like you're taking it in the direction it would go. As it is right now, I think you're making him too soft; as the saying goes, Power Corrupts...Absolute Power Corrupts Absolutely. He's dark, sure, but with the amount of power at his fingertips he'd be way darker. I know I would. I'm a fairly vicious person, if I got into a fight with someone I'd definitely kick them while they were down, but I feel like he's not even turning slightly darker than he was at the beginning of the story.
| gster391 chapter 7 . 8/7/2012
...Incest? I wouldn't mind; their DNA is all broken up anyway so it wouldn't really matter, but that seems to be the way you're headed with this...his sister is beyond devoted to him, especially if she's willing to speak against him in order to get him to think of better options.
That asked, I like the story so far; it's an interesting take on Vex Imperiums idea. I like the start better, too, it feels like it's just a better idea to start him off imprisoned, that way when he becomes super powerful he has something to look back on and say "I will never be that man again."