Reviews for Moment In Time by yoga00cat
MadamThang chapter 1 . 5/4/2011
Beautifully desperate.
Autumnltd chapter 1 . 4/19/2011
That was brilliant...
Twilight44 chapter 1 . 4/19/2011
Can't say I blame her.
beegurl13 chapter 1 . 4/19/2011
Nice job, this was good. I liked the instant connection that Edward and Bella felt, and that they couldn't deny each other. :) The end was really sad, but I think I'm kinda happy that it's not a definite end for them. You could TOTALLY continue this and have them find each other again. :D Hint-hint. :D

Great job, this was really good and I enjoyed it. :)
Dannika Summers chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
Oh my goodness, this was sooooo sad! It made me cry. You are an amazing writer, shoot for the stars because you can go farther than you ever thought possible.

This story was amazing, one of the best I have read on here. Fabulous job! I loved how there wasn't a ton of cussing, there wasn't any screaming or f**king, there was just true love. The bit about him taking off his wedding ring for her was heartbreaking. You did an amazing job!

oxox,

Danni
FarDareisMai2 chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
GAH! Heartfail! So beautifully done and so painful too.
22blue chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
"No, baby, I'm just gonna love you." So sweet and powerful and swoony. It's such a pretty and touching one shot. Good luck in the contest. :)
YellowGlue chapter 1 . 4/17/2011
Not in the bar

Sleep baby.

Don't go.

I know.

I know. I felt it.

Stay with me.

I know. I can feel it.

They do not touch.

He can feel her.

Stay with me.

She swallows her words.

They hum.

They hum.

He rolls them over.

No, baby. I'm just gonna love you.

Like every part, from the inside out.

I know. I feel it.

So soft like a pulse, push me.

I'm here.

I'm here.

I got lost.

But she's already-

And he's going with her.

Splinters and broken glass.

Hands on the door jamb.

Bare feet.

She's still crying.

Not yet.

Not yet.

I'm still here.

Do not disturb.

Not yet.

It will always belong to you.

Muffled sounds and her breath escapes her.

(Muffled sounds and heartbreak?)

Snow curls melting.

It was a detail he never noticed before, ever.

She presses her nose up against the cold window.

She could stand there forever.

Not yet.

It's amazing isn't it?

I'm still here.

Not yet.

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so much love for this story.