|Reviews for Secrets And Love and Guardians|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/15/2014
| XXXxxxxXXACOUNTKILLEDXXxxxxXXX chapter 26 . 6/16/2014
I love how you just kill every one lol
| Lord Asmodeus chapter 2 . 6/6/2014
You may wish to improve your format, it is quite difficult to interpret, and straining to understand...
On another note, the thoughts your characters though amusing are hard to differentiate with direct speech and dialogue the characters may have...
I would highly suggest you begin your story with a key, explaining what you are using for thoughts, speech and if have others 'modes' than key for that as well...
Though I must say on personal preference as well as by popular consensus of writers, it is prudent that you consider using different fonts for to differentiate your style.
Your grammar though adequate, compared to some is far too relaxed, needs to be tighter, I suggest you decrease on the number of commas you are using. Full stops should be used more frequently in your case lest your paragraphs flow into another, disrupting the flow.
Also consider revising your prosody; rhythm, stress, and intonation of speech.
Your emotive language are mediocre at best and terrible at worst, there is no emotions in your writing, it felt dull, bland, and lifeless.
The ideas and attitudes you do manage to convey honestly are idealistic, naive, and simplistic. Your problems and the solutions to such problem are weak, without any real core strength.
However I must congratulate your attempt, though currently of poor skills, you have potential
| Aj chapter 9 . 7/24/2013
The concept and idea is great I just wish your writing were better there was no flow. As much as I would love to finish I can't. Good luck in the future with your writing.
| shadow-kissed angel chapter 26 . 6/26/2013
An OK story. Very sloppy. You didn't put enough emotion into it and it was confusing at times, like it was contradictory and some stuff that would never happen or a bit too over dramatic and too straight to the point. What I'm trying to say is thar for basically all of the story you just told us what was happening instead of showing us through thoughts and emotion and action.
emotion and action.
| BrooklynCharli chapter 26 . 3/13/2013
Well that was a cheery ending... All in all I loved the story and the rose/ Christian part and it could of been a bit better written, but as I said before. It is a great story.
| iluvMomiji chapter 25 . 10/2/2012
okay...then...please UD soon!
| Filmstar xXx chapter 24 . 7/10/2012
ooohhh, massive twist. love it :D
| Nessiedxk chapter 23 . 4/12/2012
If dimiti didhave along lost brother, why would hid name be dmiti? Good story though update soon
| iluvMomiji chapter 23 . 4/8/2012
oh...wow...please UD soon!
| Secret forever chapter 22 . 3/19/2012
It getting good please update soon I wonder how they would save rose
| Sarah chapter 3 . 12/23/2011
I love that you paired Christian and rose together. Check for grammatical errors. Check for spelling errors as well. Good luck with your stories.
| Jade926 chapter 22 . 12/10/2011
| ilovezachgoode chapter 22 . 8/27/2011
| loventherussian17 chapter 22 . 8/5/2011
have fun and happy early birthday to u i hope u have a great one and great chapter update soon