|Reviews for Nameless|
| xxnarufanxx chapter 17 . 10/20/2013
very well written and very interesting plot! nicely done!
| wildface97 chapter 17 . 6/26/2013
*screams some more*
*takes a deep inhale*
Holy cheese why hasn't this been continued!? There needs to be a Book 3! An epilogue of some sort! You can't just leave it as that!
This was so amazing - I absolutely loved this. Albeit I had major difficulty picturing Ed as an old guy, and ended up giving up on the visual and just imagined him with short gray hair (it was easier). But to end it like that - gah! We need moooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeee!
| Seamew chapter 17 . 1/5/2013
Okay. This has been in my tabs to review for quite some time. I have stayed up all night, am incoherent, and can't remember my name let alone the plot but I am done with procrastination! No wait, I can remember my name now.
Ahem. Oh gosh, I can't remember much besides the fact that this was superb and I love it. At first, I had such a hard time picturing Ed as an old and wrinkly! Eventually I adjusted, partially helped by your hints. It got more difficult to remember when his old personality started shining through, which I felt was perfect.
Near the beginning, I'd imagined you'd be doing a bit of time travel or something like that, but this is so much better. And now, I cannot remember anything else, so I'll stop rambling.
Thank you very much for writing this lovely fic, and for sharing it with us!
| thequietreader chapter 17 . 12/13/2012
Just as it's getting good. Any chance of an update, any at all? Good god... the build-up of this story was rather confusing, dissatisfying, even a little dull, but I am so glad that I persevered through. Your lovely writing kept me going through the boring parts and when it finally kicked in, I was so happy to see it. Now I'm just dying for an update! Two years ago, though... damn.
Thank you for what you have written, though!
| lotrprincess chapter 17 . 8/15/2012
Oh. My. Cow. That was incredible. I just-just don't even, I mean, wow...just...wow. How do people write things like this?! In the first chapter, when you first introduced Ed as a grey-haired forty-five-year-old man, I gagged and almost stopped reading. Not because your description was disgusting or anything, but, in my mind, "Ed" and "old" didn't belong in the same sentence. I'm glad I didn't act on the impulse to quit the story. It WAS worth the wait. It's been a long time since I last tried to pull an all-nighter in order to finish a story. Even if I did inadvertently fall asleep anyway...
I was really impressed by the pacing of the story. The suspense and tension were tightly controlled, with a great build-up and some wonderful climactic moments. Dropping clues along the way (especially for those who have seen both series) made readers feel clever that they could work out theories along the way. I got the feeling that everything was well planned in advance. As those attributes are central to any mystery story, I'd say that you have a real knack for the genre.
As I said before, making Ed middle-aged, especially because he was older than Mustang, felt rather strange at first, but it really worked out. I noticed that there were reminders of his age carefully interspersed throughout, probably to prevent readers from reverting to their mental image of Ed. Even so, I'm impressed by the leap you took in aging someone whose youth is an important characteristic. It's almost physically painful to imagine Ed broken and mentally helpless. To think how the prime of his life was stolen so soon after he lost his childhood, and then to realize that it was just a shadow (though still a distinctly Ed-shaped one) of his true self, which was sleeping... I'll admit that I grew frustrates with the length of time it took for the real Ed to resurface. I need to ask: what gave you the original idea of placing him in that situation? What was your inspiration behind the storyline?
Other characters: With Mustang and his crew, it's probably best not to mess around with their timelines, since they're too varied. I'm glad you gave Basque Grand a more legitimate reason to pursue the Stone. His motives in the original anime were shaky, at best. I really liked how you dragged out Psiren's role, from an indirect reference in the first chapter to downright exploition of her talents during the last parts. The bits with Alex Armstrong seemed a bit crack-ish, though. Or, maybe that's just him. Kimblee and the gold-toothed doctor were as creepy as ever.
My biggest complaint is that the final climax (Ed getting Al and his youth back) seemed out-of-place. The storyline is directed much more towards Ed reclaiming his independence and escaping both the military and his mental prison. Keeping his ultimate goal concerning himself and the souls of Liore under wraps was a double-edged sword. Yes, it added to the suspense, but it also made the ending too abrupt. Because Al does not appear in the story almost at all, it is difficult to feel the joyous finale for what it should be. This perhaps could have been remedied by more backstory and memories including Ed and Al together, as well as the older Ed's feelings on getting Al back. I don't even know if Ed ever actually put Al in the suit of armor in this AU. If so, what the heck happened to him during the thirty years? I also felt that Dante and the Homunculi were just tossed in as more references to the anime, rather than actually affecting the plot in any way. Instead of the bit with Dante capturing Ed, I think it would have been more effective to show whatever event actually resulted in Ed becoming a Philosopher's Stone.
The abruptness of the ending also left several other unanswered questions, such as: Does Ed remember the events of the story? Or has his mind reverted to his physical age, like Al at the end of the anime? What happened/happens to Scar? Who in the military knew the truth about Fullmetal's imprisonment? How did they get the information that made them pursue him in the first place? It is not made clear who is responsible. What were Kimblee's motives? What happened to Mustang's concerns over the State Alchemist program? Where does the gold-toothed doctor fit in the equation?
I don't know if you intended to leave those things open, but, despite how well-written the story is, there are a fair amount of plot holes. A sequel of some type could answer all of the above questions and more, and this fic is definitely awesome enough to merit one. Sorry if I sound really critical, I enjoyed it very much, and I hope my nit-picky feedback can help you improve even further. Thank you for taking the time to read this ridiculously long review. I had a lot to say! Hoping to hear from you.
Over and out.
| Sedentary Wordsmith chapter 17 . 8/13/2012
It took me a while to calm down sufficiently in order to type a more or less coherent review...This story is freaking amazing! I adore it to pieces. You're a genius. I love how it almost seems to have two plots, with what happened thirty years prior and what happened in the present, even though they're obviously connected. And I just love how you still used all the characters but put them in separate times, like Bradley and Hakuro and the Homunculi in the past but Kimblee and Scar and Grand and all of Mustang's gang in the present, and somehow it all still works together... Just genius. I also love how you took some characters and references from the canon manga (such as Olivier) even though this was largely set in the first animeverse. The intriguing plot has kept me on the proverbial edge of my seat to see what happens next and how the mysteries unfold. I love every bitty bit of it. Please tell me there's more? It doesn't look like there's going to be, at this point, and I can probably fill in all the little holes with a bit of imagination, but I also would love to read more. This was brilliant. Excellent, excellent job. I loved it. Keep up the great work. (:
| Griselda Banks chapter 17 . 6/15/2012
Oh my GOODNESS. This was AMAZING! I've rarely read such a well-written, fascinating AU. Because of the little things you changed, everything was different, so even when recognizable things cropped up, I could never tell what was going to happen. And that led to even more tension than there would be otherwise, because there was no telling whether any of them would survive the ordeal.
I look up to you now. I want to write like this someday, whether it's fanfiction or original fiction. Thank you so much for writing this and inspiring me so much! _
(Just a bit of clarification, though: This story is done, right? 'Cause you haven't indicated that, but I can't see how it could be continued, so I just wanted to make sure.)
| Whitetree-Nimloth chapter 17 . 2/19/2012
This is so damn good. I loved reading this so far, I can't wait to see the end of it all. Wonderful AU. And incharacter too... loved it! (already said that )
| not paranoid enough chapter 17 . 1/28/2012
So...does this meant that there's a book three? One where poor Mustang has to deal with TWO Elrics who may or may not remember what has happened to them? Granted, it's been awhile, but think that such a book is a worthy endeavor!
Here's to hoping for a Chapter 18 :D
| merichuel chapter 17 . 11/24/2011
damnit, this was amazing! but will ed remember? and al? do they have tha ability of clappling-alchemy?
i really really like this story! u are a fucking genius!
| anathema chapter 17 . 11/14/2011
OH MY GOD THIS WAS AMAZING.
i mean it.
if this ever gets discontinued...i will cry.
but this is amazing.
| adamjb chapter 17 . 10/8/2011
And I reach the end.
A few things:
2. Ed and Roy (with his flame alchemy which, is long distance) had numerous opportunities to destroy the notes. Roy has been shown to have extreme precision with his flames. Why do they keep trying to hold onto the notes instead of destroying them at the first available opportunity? Wasn't destroying them the whole point? The whole scramble for the notes seemed a little pointless.
2. I wish Ed would learn to let others make their own choices and sacrifices for once. I hope he can come to accept and appreciate others' sacrifices by the end of the story.
3. Why did it take all of the souls in Ed's philosopher's stone to get back his brother's and his bodies?
4. And finally, I am very glad that Ed is back in to younger self and that he has Alphonse with him, but why, after the sacrifice of so many souls, didn't he get back all of his original appendages as well? Still, glad he is back to normal. Would have been weird and sad to have Ed as a young mind in an old body for the entire story.
Looking forward to more.
Also, in my review of chapter 13, I complained about this story containing yaoi, which it actually doesn't. The story is Roy/Riza, so sorry about that.
| adamjb chapter 13 . 10/7/2011
This story is fantastic! I tend to avoid yaoi (and exclamation points), but your story "Ground Rules" was very good, so I decided to give this one a shot-and boy am I glad that I did. Your writing, your characterization, your plot. All are *very* well done. So few stories get all of those right. You have made the characters your own, and you hint at a much larger world.
There are only two things that I can find fault with, but they are really more personal taste than true criticisms-take them as you will. One is the yaoi component. I think that canon did very well pairing Ed with Winry and hinting at Roy with Riza. I see no need, nor have any desire, to change that. The second deals with Ed's [SPOILER] torture and *condition*. I'm not a big fan of watching characters get physically/mentally/emotionally mutilated, especially when the process is drawn out. I think that you could have skipped over *some* of Ed's struggles, and hastened his recovery. Not that it should necessarily be any faster, just that you might move the story more quickly through it. [/SPOILER]
I apologize that my criticisms are longer than my praises, it is much easier to disparage than to compliment. I have truly enjoyed reading your story, and I even though I haven't even finished reading what you have written so far, I hope that you will updated soon. This story is going on my favorites regardless.
Keep up the good work.
| Hotaru chapter 17 . 10/4/2011
Oh God yes it was so worth the wait
| Katie chapter 4 . 9/27/2011
Ok, normally, I don't review only part way through what's posted of a story, but I gotta say I love the Early Edition reference! I loved that show. Anyway, this a a wonderful story so far. I am really enjoying reading it. It's fun watching Ed slowly come back to life.