|Reviews for The Hidden Voice|
| currantcurrant chapter 15 . 4/4/2012
Soul! The answer is soul! I feel so proud of myself Melina's story here is so beautiful. Thank you for this story
| FullMoonOcean chapter 16 . 2/11/2012
I'm really loving this fic so far! Is Melina really gone, or is she still there?
| Guest chapter 15 . 9/24/2011
Please Please PLLLEEEAAASSSEEEE keep writing this is awesome. Or else Flora will send you cookies... you have been warned...
| KatrinaKaiba chapter 15 . 9/9/2011
OMG! This was a wonderful story. I especially loved the last part of this chapter with Clark. I await the next chapter with bated breath.
| pigpuffpickle chapter 15 . 9/4/2011
I'm a riddle lover...but embarassingly enough, I can't answer this one! It a good'un! Anyway, I cried at the end when Mr Triton told Luke he loved him! Awwww! Keep writing please!
| Guest chapter 15 . 9/3/2011
Hrry up and write the next chapter!
| pigpuffpickle chapter 14 . 9/2/2011
| Pix chapter 13 . 8/23/2011
Update soon please!
| Sogo chapter 13 . 8/22/2011
| pigpuffpickle chapter 13 . 8/21/2011
WHY DON'T MORE PEOPLE REVEIW THIS?
So good! Please continue!
Poor Luke! Poor everyone, but mainly LUke!
Wonder what Emmy knows...
| James Birdsong chapter 13 . 8/15/2011
| A nonnie mouse chapter 12 . 7/31/2011
Well, first off, I must say that I love the way you write; so clean a concise! It's a very interesting and calming read.
However, I think there may be some parts you could work on. (Feel free to ignore my annoying self!)
For example, I think you could go deeper into some of the characters. Right now, Melina just seems a little bland
and flat. You didn't really give a very good explanation of why Mr. Whistler did what he did, and although it is shown in the movie this story hasn't seemed to quite capture that. Melina seems a little, almost, too cozy with the idea of being in someone else's body. In my opinion (ahem . . . which you may not want . . . ) the average person would be much more disturbed, and would probably want to find out how this was possible, would question their beliefs/ &c. If Melina is not like this, you gave no reason why.
There were also many grammatical errors, particularly with the dialogue. Remember to re-read everything you've
written again and again, at least give some effort to be correct. Also, you may want to make the story go faster, if I may add. Twelve chapters have gone and not much of importance has happened.
By the by, I'm really not trying to bash you! I think your story has promise (unlike most of the hormone-driven junk posted up here) and I'm trying to help you push it to its best. I really, really hope you continue and am eagerly awaiting the next installment!
| Traveller chapter 1 . 6/20/2011
I don't get why this has just four reviews. I have never reviewed before, but you simply deserved more.
It's really one of my favourite fanfics of all time, you did a great job describing the feelings and the events, I especially like how Melina's character gets mixed up with Luke, like in that scene, where she starts reading out loud to Luke's teddy bear. That was so cute.
Also I really liked the idea that it may be just Luke pretending to be Melina, and I really want to know if that's true, so
please continue and complete this wonderful story !
(just make the chapters a bit longer, if you can?)
| pigpuffpickle chapter 8 . 4/23/2011
Very well done, BTW. Really like it. Keep writing! Please.
| Alli-dunno chapter 8 . 4/22/2011
This is still quite an interesting little story. I can't wait to read more!