|Reviews for Thanks to a Snake|
| BlazeStryker chapter 32 . 12m
OR? I think not.
Face it, the Um-biatch is mad, bad, and dangerous to know.
| BlazeStryker chapter 2 . 3/30
...bets she was dunked on by brewers spelling it with two "L"s for quite a few years? I mean, given the length of time it takes to do a good brewing...
| Ravenclaw Midnight Blue chapter 8 . 3/28
Not that I'm fond of Dumbledore after his treatment of Harry from The Order Of The Phoenix onwards -but I wasn't keen on this chapter. It felt rushed, clumsy in the delivery (Dumbledore's thinking was too simplistic and blinkered for the character), and OTT (over the top) in how the Goblins treated Dumbledore.
There's also the ongoing grammatical issues here, which I've noticed in the previous chapters. Still, I suppose that they won't be addressed, given that this thankfully-complete story is several years old now.
On the positive side, the previous, short chapter with Draco was handled better.
Now moving onto better chapters within the story...
| Ravenclaw Midnight Blue chapter 2 . 3/2
'...said it's not called a wife beater, what is it called in England for future references?'
I forgot to mention 'Wife beater' in my Ch1 review. My reaction when I read your description of Harry wearing a wife beater was 'Er... What!?' I have never heard of this term applied to clothing before.
In case nobody has told you already, the term you are looking for is a sleeveless vest. I also think you wrote 'diapers' with regard to when Daphne and Tracy first knew each other. The British term is nappies.
Some grammatical mistakes found in Ch2, such as missing questions marks.
Otherwise, a sound chapter. Good to see Harry and his friends building up a support network and friendships with Neville, Hermione (and later Susan) - all in other houses. I wish the canon Harry had done more of that, compared to the minimum that he actually did!
| Ravenclaw Midnight Blue chapter 1 . 2/28
I'm reading this story, as it's so hard to find a decent, complete fanfiction story with Harry sorted into Slytherin (without him going dark), with Daphne as his love interest. So I'll see how it goes.
Some points with the 1st chapter:
1) It's a very long chapter! But given that you wrote 55 chapters in all, and the story is complete, I'll roll with it.
2) You gave Harry a silly hair tail and took away his glasses! I remember reading an article where JK Rowling was annoyed at a German(?) book cover of one of her books, featuring Harry without glasses. She expressed that they had missed the point. I agree, Harry's bespectactled appearance is one of his key features, and helps to define him as a character who relies on his wits to rise above his unhappy childhood. Whilst I've writen two stories of Harry without glasses, it was because he had swapped identities with someone else - so that someone else was 'Harry', complete with glasses, to the wider world. I will continue to read this story, picturing Harry with glasses and a normal haircut, as per the films. Likewise, he is Harry to me - not Hardwin.
3) Harry seems to be remarkably unconcerned about the marriage contract! Surely he would've panicked and wondered if Daphne, before meeting her, would turn out to be unlikeable? There should've been a clear get out clause for the kids, in case they decided they weren't compatible whilst growing up - instead of being forced together!
4) There are some grammatical errors ('except' in the first scene in Ch2 for example, should be 'accept'- but as the story is now complete, I guess that it won't be edited further.
Otherwise, your story looks promising so far. Thank you for writing and sharing it.
| eagle164 chapter 44 . 2/27
Just note, Harry's patrons for this story is she wolf, not a stag. Love your story.
| chc91776 chapter 14 . 2/22
10 years later and I'm still annoyed with all the yup P popping and smacking on the back of the head
| jpikachu45 chapter 1 . 2/10
screw the haters make lemonade with lemons hence more lemons please HAIL AUTHOR
| flys36 chapter 3 . 1/27
| flys36 chapter 3 . 1/27
I thought his name was Hardwin not Hadian
| fuunu chapter 29 . 1/26
nice though DD went to quickly to meet death
| HarryTheHorcrux chapter 39 . 1/20
Speaking Celtic? Had you done any research you'd know that they spoke Gaelic much like many of their descendants still do to this day. Welsh and both Irish Gaelic and Scottish Gaelic are spoken by Celtic people but people who speak Welsh can't understand Scottish or Irish Gaelic and neither can they understand Welsh. That's why "Speak Celtic" really doesn't make any sense. Please research before you write anything, especially when you're talking about facets of true history
| Odi1 chapter 37 . 1/12
I actually love it and I support this story, but please do not write anymore sexual content. These big lemons are much much too sour and bitter!
| Fil V A25 chapter 25 . 1/8
I’m afraid I’m going to have to take points from you for misspelling some words, one of the words you misspelled was kill. (K.I.L.L.)
| 00 chapter 33 . 1/7
Could have been a great story. But adding all the silly smut scenes was unnecessary. One ok. Two maybe. Beyond that boring.