|Reviews for Scream|
| GalaxyGirl999 chapter 1 . 5/29
Hold up!WHAT THE FUCK(Laughing really hard)JUST HAPPENED!I HAD TO SHOP 12 FUCKING
TIMES AND CONTINUE READING IS THIS WRITTEN PORT YO FUCK THIS MAN!I DON'T GET IT I KNOW SEX BUT FLCL I NOT SAYING ITS NOT GOOD BUT DAMN HE MADE HER SCREAM LIKE... FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK I WISH I COULD HAVE SEX LIKE THAT
| alieneyes24 chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
no. please learn to spell.
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/11/2014
i like how he said "yes I was amazing" lolXD
| a.amazing.austin chapter 1 . 9/19/2011
it was a good idea but they where so.. weird sounding. is this how you would say it? try saying it out loud and it probably will sound differently to you than when you where typing
hope this helps :)
| intoxicatelove chapter 1 . 8/1/2011
Lol because of you, Haruhi and Kyoya are my new favorite Ouran paring. Also, I enjoyed your story alot. I dont really give a damn that the diologue was "textbook" style, or so they say. The ony way I could have disliked this is because of improper grammar, which there were only one or two mistakes. Dont be intimidated by what others say. In the future, you should practice descriptive diologue. I too have problems with diologues, but I never give up. Anyway, once again, I really enjoyed your story and hope you continue to make more! ~With love and cookies, Amora :) P.S: I am typing this with my mobile phone, so I can't really respond back if you reply to this. Just know that by Thursday, I will get my Internet back and I will respond to whatever you have to say. I can read the reply though, it's just doesn't let me respond to PM's. Once again, I thoroughy enjoyed your story!
| oresama will gekokujou you chapter 1 . 7/22/2011
i lost my courage to write a lemon because of that. :(
all my thoughts crushed as i read your story.
i feel like im reading two ROBOTS inter-coursing.
| Lord Neos chapter 1 . 6/20/2011
Hate to repeat but yeah, textbook style
| Grimm-chan chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
Your story was good. My recondmondation would be to use quotation marks and a setup that u would find in a book. The plot and lemon was good, but the way you detail and h
| Starjean chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
It read like a textbook. :$ Haruhi was kind of OOC. Try to work the details into the FF, and not just outright state them, and you'll have a better FF on your hands. _
| Lily chapter 1 . 5/15/2011
HAHA he made her scream XD
| Inuyasha-Lover513 chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
that was pretty lame.. need to make your stories actually flow, the breaks in the speaking is very disrupting, and it seems very cut and dry as a sex scene, you might want to work on those,
| PlayYourRole chapter 1 . 5/4/2011
Pretty boring /
| Tracey4t chapter 1 . 5/3/2011
Where do you get your ideas? Seriously your stories are like some the most original ideas on this web site, I like it.
| Rachael chapter 1 . 5/1/2011
This was the unsexiest thing I've ever read. I felt like I was reading a textbook.