|Reviews for Semper Nirvana|
| brony757 chapter 3 . 2/9
I love this story. At the end of this chapter, I nearly died laughing! Please continue it.
| tommy.nelson.10441 chapter 3 . 11/14/2013
man i am sad you stopped witting this story i love your sence of humor hand it has a good plot also ill be waiting just in case you do update any day soon, good luck.
| Mandalore Requiem chapter 3 . 6/5/2013
Brilliant ending. Hope to see more.
But I think you can push the analytical nature of the Marines a little more. Such as noticing the little things most people take for granted and always being alert. Especially if they're Special Operations - got a cousin who's an Engineer with the Rangers. Can't sneak up on him even when I try and I'm a slippery bugger. I honestly think the guy sleeps with one eye open or something.
| Rmito chapter 3 . 3/7/2013
my one complaint is that i did not find this story sooner. Honestly man i enjoyed the read hoping for an update when u can
| Hkblarg Et caetera chapter 3 . 2/21/2013
| guerilla sam chapter 3 . 12/17/2012
here's a suggestion for your story...if your still doing it. maybe you could have like an insurgent like character to have some conflict with the marines. Not that the character is really a bad guy more like they were on different sides of the war and this guy and marines have hostility against each other. PM me if you want to hear more on this idea
also Update dammit!
| animecollecter chapter 3 . 9/24/2012
now that was funny :"Someone help us." Jura whined pathetically.
Suddenly there was a sound of tearing metal as a hole opened up in the wall. Dozer stuck his head in the whole and asked, "Did some beautiful ladies ask for a rescue?"
His answer was the click of a glock's hammer being pulled back.
Pulling his head back from the gap he said to his companion, "Clip, I think someone in there wants to talk to you.":
lol i hope more chapters come soon.
| Sabby1 chapter 3 . 8/31/2012
Heee. Okay, that was not very constructive, but the ending scene was funny. Let me try again.
I started reading this morning at work but the forces of evil conspired against me and I wasn't able to finish chapter one and two until I got home. And I love it.
Now, let's get the bad stuff out of the way first: You are suffering a severe shortage of apostrophes and capital letters. Here have some *hands you a bag full of apostrophes and ABCs*. Aside from that, the prologue and a small part of chapter one were showing doorbell syndrome. That is to say, you started a frivolous amount of sentences with the -ing form of a word. That tends to sound like a doorbell after a while. And you've got no excuse for that because it didn't happen in chapter 2 at all. Third and last, you skimmed on really introducing the Vandread canon characters, which is a typical fanfic thing to do. Kay, that was the bad part.
Now the good parts. I love the plot you've cooked up. I love your original characters (I'm assuming all of the marines are original characters because you did a really good job introducing them and showing glimpses of their characters in the exposition). I'm totally forgiving the shameless self-insertion, because your character in this story is actually funny and sympathetic for not being a complete Mr.-Perfect-Charm-Your-Pants-Off-Gary-Stu. You introduced the love interests/couples in this story very nicely. My favorite pairing has to be Knight/Ghost because they're just too cute, really. Close second is Duelo and Parfait, with Hibiki/Dita coming in third and Jon/Meia bringing up the rear. I've always been a bigger fan of the dark horse couples and I'm assuming that Hibiki/Dita and Jon/Meia are kind of the mainstream couples so...*shrugs* Sadly though, your muse must have taken a round-trip around the world because you haven't updated this in roughly Forever! Get her back and sit your camouflage butt down and type!
Oh, I never watched VanDread so I don't know if the anime Duelo is a mixture of Spock and Dr. McCoy from Star Trek TOS, but I like him like that, so even if he isn't, keep writing him that way. "I'm a doctor, not an engineer"..."Fascinating." *snickers* I like that man.
So, write more, I want to see what the marines get up to on their way to the guy and girl planet. You've got 270 days to fill with mischief, misunderstandings and marines. And then of course I want to see how they fight the big bad and save the day for both man and womankind.
Chop chop, we don't have eternity. Time's wasting!
And if you still can't guess who's leaving this review, I'll be giving you a very nasty glare on Thursday.
| Exess chapter 3 . 7/15/2012
famah and ohmah are reversed
| Twitter-hikari95 chapter 3 . 4/7/2012
Oh...my...well, this certainly is one of the better stories that I've read. I really like this, and I hope that you find your muse again and finish this. Oorah for the win!
| Dunedain ranger of the north chapter 3 . 3/11/2012
I have to say that this is a pretty interesting story. I was wondering, when are you going to update this, I would like to see what happens next!
| Tenbatsu Saigetsu chapter 3 . 2/17/2012
Incredibly well written. To be honest, I had my doubts when I started reading the story, but as it progressed I see that you really did a great job. Looking forward to seeing more of your work.
-Revan the Redeemer
| Victor Virus chapter 3 . 2/9/2012
the last bit i have to admit was kind of funny. sure let the other guy get shot in the head by telling him someone wants to talk to him the lieutenant will forgive him. anyway great story thus far man keep up the great work
| Akytsu Frozen chapter 3 . 1/26/2012
Hi there i love this fic,so imasking if you have plans on continue wit it i hope you do well see ya!
| Everwolf chapter 3 . 1/17/2012
I like this is fun and a little bit over the top but still hitching.