|Reviews for Over Time|
| wryter501 chapter 12 . 6/8
but, you know, without proof. merlin just shrugs and goes, whatever gaius gave him must have kicked in, finally. and you've already had uther admit to the realization that merlin means something to arthur...
arthur's argument about merlin's loyalty and concern, it seems to me, might be counterproductive at this point. arthur already knows uther doesn't care for him a bit, it might be better to have him argue the no-evidence angle, rather than merlin's purity of motivation...
and. i love their reunion after both are restored - but perhaps it might have been better staged in arthur's room, rather than the dungeon? arthur knows merlin is going to be released, he could have leon order merlin to report, rather than dragging his injured self down to the cells... (you could even set up a bit more angst for merlin, if he's not sure if he's going to find arthur alive or dead, once he gets to arthur's room...)
but. overall, very well done and i enjoyed it very much!
| wryter501 chapter 11 . 6/8
i like the idea of peter giving his magic to arthur to save merlin (i kind of like a 'bad guy' who turns sympathetic, anyway). only, i'm not sure i believe it's necessary. peter claims that his magic was blocked by his father as a child, but... merlin noticed strong magic when he went into the room where the spell was originally being performed. and, peter evidently has the power to appear/disappear like anhora did. and to heal nearly-fatal wounds, pretty well. and, this is only one man, that has merlin. between peter and arthur, they could sneak up on and overpower the guy, don't you think? especially if it's going to take awhile for arthur to adjust to having the magic, or being able to use it?...
and, the last scene here, a bit obscure. peter's back, to warn arthur about - what? i guess uther decided that arthur /not/ dying was down to merlin using magic, but that's kind of a leap, which he hasn't made before - quite willing to credit gaius with a miracle. and, to look a gift horse in the mouth, so to speak?...
| wryter501 chapter 10 . 6/8
nice. typical 'merlin desperate to save arthur but unable to' we all have to admit that we love. ;) and, his reaction to the stranger sorcerer there.
i'm a bit afraid that peter sacrificed something, though, to save arthur... i kind of assumed, arthur's condition was due to his earlier injury, and maybe over-exerting himself in merlin's rescue, but this seems more... magical in nature. so, hm.
| wryter501 chapter 9 . 6/8
as much as i 'like' the situation merlin is in - young, helpless, beaten, discouraged, etc. i think the set-up could be stronger. i guess that when the bandit spoke the spell, merlin lost another couple of years b/c he couldn't let his own magic fight it, b/c arthur was right there... so if we're dealing with merlin around age 8 or 9, that could explain why he doesn't/can't use his magic to defend himself. or, if he thinks arthur really is dead, the shock or the despair could explain the same thing, like he's just given up and is allowing this to happen to him, like he deserves it. just... you could be clearer on that? i know folks can be really critical on merlin's magical self-defense, sometimes...
his rescue, though, was well done. i expected arthur, but you didn't identify his rescuer. except for merlin's realization of that man's magic (which made me think, it was peter)... and then straight into the scene where merlin's back in camelot and fully restored - but arthur's dying! that jump forward in time (and subsequent flash-back fill-in) can be tricky, but i think you've handled it well so far...
| wryter501 chapter 8 . 6/8
not really sure why arthur keeps looking for peter. i mean, they already spoke, and peter demonstrated his ability to escape without arthur being able to do anything about it...
nice bit of action/drama. raise the stakes, kind of. arthur's injured, merlin's physically incapable hauling his butt to safety - and then the guy reads that spell. (only, how come arthur is carrying this bit of paper around with him - isn't that like asking for trouble if the spell isn't supposed to be repeated?) i gather, that's why merlin can't use his magic to defend them...
| wryter501 chapter 7 . 6/8
but. arthur is now treating merlin like his physical age. that's a hard balance to strike, i think. i've read kid!merlin stories, even ones where he's age-regressed, but none, i think, where his mental age stays the same. but, having the physical limitations/needs of young boy, as well as everyone (and specifically, arthur?) treating him as such, affects merlin psychologically...
though from arthur's pov, it's pretty much impossible for him to treat merlin his proper age. pushing him as far as strength and stamina go, the teasing/insulting, leaving him to take care of himself - you just can't do that with a 13-year-old the way you can with a 19-year-old... and merlin himself, is feeling/acting more like a vulnerable boy than a capable young man...
not sure i'm sold on peter, yet. i get that not every magic-user is a vengeful enemy, and i'm okay with him capitalizing on his talent in a small way. i even rather prefer a magic-user who doesn't automatically gasp over merlin's destiny and power, etc. but... not sure i get why he shows up in this scene. to apologize? to taunt arthur? to make a deal? i mean, is he /sorry/ his spell went wrong and affected an 'innocent' bystander?...
| wryter501 chapter 6 . 6/8
bit worried that arthur takes merlin without gaius' permission. possibly merlin's presence would be necessary if a solution was found, but isn't it just as likely that merlin's condition might require the physician unexpectedly?
i do like the bit with the neckerchief. :)
| wryter501 chapter 5 . 6/8
it's kind of an interesting psychological question. if the body is young, and the mind is not... it's not just a question of how he's /treated/, though that's part of it, it's how he /feels/?
it's kind of an instinct, isn't it. when you're hurt or scared or overwhelmed by tragedy. to want to retreat to a childish place of safety, of not knowing, of letting someone else handle it. it's why grown men will still cry for their mothers when they're dying...
i like that you show this without being obvious about it. the way merlin reacts to having his back rubbed...
| wryter501 chapter 4 . 6/8
not completely clear on the situation with merlin's magic through this enchantment. i take it, his magic protected his memories from being lost, and is trying to fight off the spell. only, he's struggling to contain the magic so no one sees it? and it just kind of - explodes?
okay, so. the potion activates on the spoken spell. and b/c merlin was 'infected' with the potion when the original explosion occurred, another regression is triggered when the words are spoken - unless his magic is allowed the freedom to combat losing another couple of years?
| wryter501 chapter 3 . 6/8
i was wondering a bit, how the reverse-aging spell might work with merlin's magic. whether he'd return to the level of control/knowledge that he would have had at that age, or whether he'd retain the power and memory of spells he'd learned since then...
i like arthur going to seek out the druids for help. it's a good detail to define without being specific, arthur's attitude toward magic.
i like arthur instinctively knowing this was merlin, no matter how screwy it looks, and protecting him. putting merlin right behind him shows a deep-seated trust, i think.
| wryter501 chapter 2 . 6/8
it's not easy to alert the reader to what is going on, without the character himself knowing, but this was well-written. we can assume a little of what the woman wanted for her ailing father, and the suddenly too-big clothes clue the reader in, without removing much of merlin's confusion... i like the first detail being his hair. a bit ridiculous, but also a bit /wrong/. kind of funny-ominous, i like the mix.
| wryter501 chapter 1 . 6/8
this was a good beginning. typical courtroom scene, uther condemning a magic-user without caring what their purpose or reason was... but then, shocker! merlin is gone...
and then, merlin's pov. something is wrong, wrong with the magic, he's lost and alone but waiting/hoping for arthur...
| Clara Brighet chapter 1 . 7/14/2014
Ooh, this is really good so far. :) I can't believe you don't have more reviews - silly ungrateful peoples! Here, have some internet cookies to make oh feel better. Don't worry, they weren't baked by Morgana ;)
Thank you for writing!
| bluespiritgal chapter 12 . 9/28/2012
Excellent story for one chapter to the next! A great read!
| Nebriniel Peredhil chapter 12 . 6/15/2012
great story I loved it