|Reviews for One Hundred Weeks|
| nuclear death frog chapter 3 . 6/13/2011
Nice chapter. I liked the first examiner Shirou; he's blunt, and funny with it. "Don't do anything stupid" is a pretty good rule for a ninja, and in general for that matter.
The second exam was probably supposed to be a lot harder than Naruto's team found it, heh. Good on them for thinking unconventionally. And it does seem very Naruto to pass out those extra fangs and unknowingly mess with the Sand's test.
It was fun seeing the Hidden Rock genin from "OHD".
So even without her ice techniques, Hidden Snow's Rui is a genin in name only? That makes sense. With her ice techniques, she and her brother were supposed to be able to easily defeat a squad of chuunin that were their escorts/bodyguards on their way to the Leaf when Ichizo was injured. This implies that Rui and Ichizo were at least on the level of strong chuunin, perhaps low jounin level. Which is still nothing compared to someone who can give Jiraiya a challenge (Yuki, from the prequel). It was funny seeing her call Naruto "Naru-chan", and seeing how he deflected that question. I don't think that worked too well, but it looks like Chouji decided to ignore it, and Hinata would never have asked.
One thing I noticed that might be an error: Hinata, in a brief point-of-view bit, was thinking she could not fail a third time, because that would be very bad for her. This is Hinata's fourth try at the Chuunin Exam, because she referenced Kiba and Shino from a previous try at Grass. They must have taken the exam there and her teammates passed without her. So I'm not sure whether or not that's something you should edit to "fourth failure", because... well, I mean, her father didn't seriously expect her to beat Neji, right? Then again, he probably did. In your story, Hyuuga Hiashi seems to be an even bigger asshole than in canon.
So, this chapter fairly well confirmed that Fuu of the Hidden Waterfall is a vessel for some kind of powerful entity. I'm interested to know what that entity is, if that isn't a detail that will be a plot point in "OHW". But knowing the principles of Chekhov (see TV Tropes), now that it's been talked about, it must come up. Especially since your author's notes at the end of the story referenced Akatsuki. Obviously, they could just be after the known entities in Gaara or Naruto, but possibly not.
A question, though, since we're on the subject of powerful entities that may be sealed into people. From "OHD", Kaida, the Hidden Cloud's High Priestess of the Thunder Dragon, and secret Akatsuki member, now deceased ... was Akatsuki interested in the avatar she'd sealed into herself? I suppose not, since Kaida was a member of Akatsuki herself. Akatsuki's leader, "Pain", must know of the Thunder Dragon and not consider a mere avatar of it worth his group's attention. I was going to ask in this review about Yuki and the snow maiden she'd sealed into herself, but I remembered that in "OHD" you specifically stated Yuki *killed* a snow maiden and only sealed its power into herself, not a living maiden. What types of entities IS Akatsuki interested in, if that's not a massive spoiler? It is known they want the Nine-tailed Fox. It can be presumed they might, possibly, want One-tailed Shuukaku, which is sealed into Gaara. And since you are using Fuu and have already called attention to whatever is in her, she must be a plausible target.
Well, I don't really think you're going to give me much of an answer to the above, if any, since it probably consists of major spoilers, but I wanted to ask, since it's relevant.
I liked the chapter, and await more. Cheers!
| GeshronTyler chapter 3 . 6/12/2011
Nice chapter! I'm glad you got most of the exam dealt with, and you managed to be original in the test obstacles. I'm looking forward to the final exam, hopefully it will manage to be completed without interruption. Likely, the "interruptions" will be before the exams. _ At the least, we need to see Hinata and Naruto fight, if she can manage it without fainting. I don't recall if it was mentioned, but I guess that if Hinata doesn't make Chunin, she'll be sealed and/or have to stop being a ninja? A possible betrothal/marriage could also be a factor.
Sakura's right in the thick of things, no surprise. I wonder if we'll see Sasori? That fight was when Chiyo grudgingly let go of her vendetta, if I remember correctly.
Fuu, is she a bearer of one of the "tailed beasts", or some "lesser" creature? I guess we'll find out.
Thanks, read you next time.
| dyroxium chapter 3 . 6/12/2011
Most excellent work
| xxxD chapter 3 . 6/12/2011
No, it's better if you have 50 pieces of this size. Muuuch better. Esp if each one comes once a week.
| PaperRabbit chapter 2 . 6/12/2011
Wow. You don't know how happy you made me with this sequel you are writing. I have lost hope of ever reading something worthwhile in the Naruto fandom again. I checked from time to time but never saw anything like your work in One Hundred Days, or others like Soul Voice or Medusa Javelin, which I see are part of your favorites.
I never got around writing a review for One Hundred Days, sorry about that. I'm taking the opportunity now to tell you that it was such an amazing work.
I'm really excited about this. I can't wait for the next chapter.
| jamester56 chapter 2 . 6/11/2011
Love it. At last, a believable Sakura- strong, but not ridiculously so- and a getting-stronger Naruto who is neither an idiot nor a genius. As well as this, a non-repentant, sneaky Kyuubi. Less OOC behavior than I've ever seen in a fic. Can't wait to see more of Gaara.
| J. Palmgren chapter 2 . 5/26/2011
Hard to say much with only two chapters but the numerous often hard to credit changes in events confuse me and make me not really like this fic.
One of the more annoying:
Konoha had several containers before Naruto in the manga and Minato was called an expert but now suddenly the seal is poorly put together and Jiraya is no longer a proper seal-master but instead has to go to a member of another semi-hostile village and let her screw with the seal without getting a clue before she betrays them? I disbelieve.
The original manga plot is poor but this is even more of a mess. I see no way to save the pattern of the fic and it should end in bloody tragedy.
| KamilahKaliope chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
I've just finished read 'One Hundred days' and It's awesome :)
Oh! and this story is really great too!
| skywiseskychan chapter 2 . 5/19/2011
Well you certainly have created a monster of a team with those three. Of course now I'm concerned about Fuu of the green hair. I wonder if she's got windham locked up inside her like one of the great tailed beasts! Oh wait, now I'm crossing both genre and anime without a clutch. Still you have made her suitable concerning. Of course now suspicious little me I have to wonder if earth won't suddenly show up with another 10 teams as well. Things do certainly seem rather dire. Also, I hate Diedra, and I love him. I hate him because he annoys me but I love him because he is just a guy who is a really good ninja. He doesn't have the usual immortality techniques of the others, or cheating eyes etc, but is still just plain bad news.
| Wavelet365 chapter 2 . 5/16/2011
Huh. So one of the best writers of both Naruto and Sakura is back in business. Well, I'm not complaining. One Hundred Days was always one of my favourite Naruto stories, and, while it's too early to say whether this story will also meet that rather high standard, I am far from disappointed with the two chapters which you have written so far. Chapter one tied up most of the plot threads left hanging at the end of the last story, and also featured some great lines, such as Anko and Neji's banter. I also have to say that, while your first two suggestions for Tobi's true identity in this AU were rather tedious, I find the idea of Tobi as Sailor Moon exceptionally appealing, in the sense that, while it would utterly kill my suspension of disbelief, Sailor Moon vs. Akatsuki might just be hilarious enough to make up for that deficit. Of course, I understand that this was a joke, but, even so, it gives me amusing ideas.
As far as the story being AU goes, well, I am one of the former Naruto fans who feels that Kishimoto trolled my fandom. The One Hundred Days history beats Kishimoto's ridiculous prophecies and absurd moon plan any day, not to mention his recent 'war,' which is only equaled by Bleach's Winter War in its inability to keep my interest. As far as I am concerned, feel free to pick and choose whichever parts of canon you like. I trust that you are a strong enough story-teller to be able to discern between aspects of the Naruto canon which add interesting aspects to the One Hundred Days universe and most of the last one or two hundred chapters of Naruto (which should have never been written, as far as I'm concerned).
Anyway, chapter two was also quite strong. As usual, you knack for writing interesting political intrigue keeps the story fresh, and I was happy to see that you kept the number of new characters introduced to a manageable level. Even in One Hundred Days itself, I often struggled to keep track of just who was who, so I appreciate your use of recognizable characters together with only a few particularly important and interesting new characters. Additionally, I particularly enjoyed the interactions between Sakura and each of Danzo, Temari, Asuma and Yuugao. I also continue to find never-ending amusement in Sakura's terrifying reputation in the Hidden Sand.
All in all, I have little but positive things to say about the beginning of this story. Keep up the excellent work.
| Yami Umi chapter 2 . 5/16/2011
Well... you still haven't lost your touch.
| coool chapter 2 . 5/16/2011
Well dude, this was amazing. 60,000 words or so in 2 months? im in.
| Yami Umi chapter 1 . 5/16/2011
god, I didn't even START, but I've gotta say this:
YES, BABY, YES! \o/
| nuclear death frog chapter 2 . 5/15/2011
Glad to see this chapter. The most enjoyable part probably was Kabuto's match with Sasuke. I like Kabuto's point of view here; he seemed in Part I of the manga to be an interesting character and individual, and your depiction of him in "One Hundred Days" followed that quite well, in my mind. I am pleased to see it continue in "One Hundred Weeks."
The continuation of Sakura's fearsome reputation (*snicker*) brought a smile to my face; I liked that joke in OHD, and seeing that Gaara found it to be useful for himself is pretty neat.
From the comments on TFF, I understand that Fuu is a demon container. I recall the picture that opened manga Chapter 420, which showed all nine of the demon vessels together. That chapter was after I stopped reading the series, but I thought it was a fairly neat picture when I found it online once. The girl wearing a Waterfall forehead protector in that picture must be Fuu, and from that picture, she has the seven-tailed beast. Also, you have apparently decreased her age by at least a few years. Are you retaining from canon what the two-tailed to eight-tailed beasts have as forms, and what villages they hail from (you have for Fuu, but others may not)? Or are you going to scrap them and make up your own? I liked the original ideas for vessels that you had in "One Hundred Days", the Thunder Dragon avatar, and the snow maiden.
Watching Sakura play diplomat was interesting, and I got a chuckle out of Asuma and Yuugao calling her 'Sakura-taichou' since they are both jounin with many additional years of field experience over their mission commander.
The pieced-together squad of Naruto, Chouji, and Hinata appeals to me. Naruto and Chouji had that failed mission together and were apparently something of allies/friends years ago in the Leaf Ninja Academy (along with Shikamaru and Kiba), and of course Hinata adores Naruto and looks up to him, so they ought to have good teamwork. I'd like them to all win through and get promoted, but the exam is supposed to be hard and dangerous, so if they don't it's not as if that isn't understandable. Although Naruto would probably go utterly nuts if he had to survive a year without ramen; he didn't like going without it for mere days to weeks in "One Hundred Days."
A note from your response to my review of the prelude: you said you hadn't yet seen a name for the Rookie Nine plus Team Gai grouping that you liked. If at any time you decide you like 'Rookies Eleven' that I suggested, you're more than welcome to it.
A nice, enjoyably long chapter overall. Hoping for more without terrible delay.
| maxslayer10 chapter 2 . 5/15/2011
I cant wait to read more of this story. Cant wait to see some more interaction between Naruto and Sakura. I am going to reread your 100 days story so I can fully enjoy the sequel.
Please Update Soon!