|Reviews for Stolen|
| This guy doesnt have a clue chapter 7 . 5/20/2011
Great story... i take me hat of to you.
| Lientjuhh chapter 7 . 5/18/2011
I like it.. Well done.. :)
| Zane Makura chapter 7 . 5/17/2011
Now if only there actually was lemony makeup sex to read. *sigh*
Thank you for the delightful piece. Not sure what to take from this last chapter but overall the story is well written and nice. I like it for sure though i can't really say i love it. Great work nonetheless. I hope to see more of this pairing from you maybe . Good luck with the rest of your writing
| Mrmikezabini227 chapter 7 . 5/17/2011
so how did Bella die?
| Kitsune's Den chapter 7 . 5/17/2011
Good story! You did an amazing job on this. Congrats on finishing it! )
| luvbug080688 chapter 7 . 5/17/2011
fabulous story. good work. my only gripe...it wasn't long enough : P
| xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 7 . 5/17/2011
I like it! **
| excentrykemuse chapter 7 . 5/16/2011
A wonderful ending. I like how Harry had to hide his age (but was able to do it unlike the Cullens!) and was still very much the "himself" you created in this fic. Amelia was a wonderful addition as well, and though tragic I think you hit on what Bella's life would have been without the glamor of vampires and werewolves dead on.
Congrats on a story well-done!
| Hikory chapter 7 . 5/16/2011
How did Bella die? I mean was it old age, normal death, accident? What did Edward mean that Bella's life was miserable? Did she never recall that she loved someone as much as she did, and that she nearly had a chance at living forever or even get the feeling that she had something going on? I'm confused at what you put at the end, where Edward said he couldn't let her go completely that she allowed him to indulge but he never crossed the line. Does that mean that he never let her see him, but he saw her? Hahahahahaha I love Harry's teasing with Jacob, and the part where Edward gets all the Cullen men to stop laughing at him and freeze. Is Rosalie there? I don't think she'd be there seeing as how she never truly liked Bella, but still. If Harry doesn't age like normal people do, then how much can he reveal? And by shifting you mean turning into a wolf? How exactly would that keep them 'young'? All in all I enjoyed this chapter, and while I kinda wish it was a mpreg just so I could see Jacob flipping out when Harrys' giving birth and really screaming at Jacob *imagines it and giggles* I'm happy with the end result anyways.
| Elfin69 chapter 7 . 5/16/2011
This was a great ending. I am glad that Edward got his happy ending also and I loved how Harry teased Jacob and Edward by thinking it since we all know that Edward normally could not read his mind. maybe you should do an Edward/Harry pairing or one of the Cullen men and Harry.
| MJ chapter 7 . 5/16/2011
Hmm.. those who flirts are the ones that usually also cheats. This has been somewhat realistic otherwise so why wear rose tinted glasses in that aspect.
In any case, this has been an interesting read. I liked the idea of lightness that you incorporated this Harry. It didn't quite get there. As constructive critisism I'd have to say that this was too huge of a plot and character problem to be good in this short form. Everything was sort of forced to stay half assed. I liked the whole idea of Harry being a fat kid and had some issues over that. Unfortunately there was no space in the story for that. The only place it came out was in your author notes and that really isn't a story at all. The whole sexy!Harry was also poorly done, he came off as a cheating slut. That again I could see working well, but it would need a lot of subtle background story which would again require a lot more story. Jacob or Pudgy was also left non existent here. He remained very one dimensional.
This was good, like I said, but a reader has to use way too much of their own imagination. Plus some things just jumped up in your face here, like the whole Harry's holier than though attitude and obliviations. Those would need to be lot more subtle to work because there are something that Harry Potter just doesn't do. I like Harry/Jacob a lot but here I think it might've been better to leave the whole Potter verse thing off. This guy here was just too much off. It was some totally other guy that was just called Harry and let's face it, then it isn't Harry. I saw from few other reviews that it was kinda obvious and irritating to many.
I can't say you should revamp this story or edit it 'cause I do see where you were going with this and kudos for finishing a fic!
| xDarklightx chapter 7 . 5/16/2011
I love it. It was a great story. I really enjoyed reading it.
| Oxymironic chapter 6 . 5/12/2011
Ugh. Couldn't even make it through the chapter. Even if it got better, I don't think I could continue. The mistakes aren't noticeable, so it's not that. No, it's not even really your fault. Well, except Harry. His holier than thou attitude is a little much. Other than that, it's mostly about how so many people decide to bash in just this way. Even if the pairing is Harry/Ed, or something other, people just lack sufficient evidence or explanation for that particular course of action.
I can't understand how Harry can judge what someone else can or can't do when it doesn't seem he would know, or have the experience to even comment. I get the whole protection thing, but he went too far and his stated personality shouldn't even allow him to be able to say the things he has.
And no, I'm not pro Bella/Ed, or Bella/Jake. I could care less who the pairing is so long as the story is believable within the well written world of the fanfic author's work.
| Wintereve chapter 6 . 5/12/2011
Good chapter. Incidently, what happend to James Potter? Harry is not Lily's secret love child with James, passed of as Charlie's, right? LOL!
| xDarklightx chapter 6 . 5/11/2011
I love it. I can't wait to read the end. Update soon.