Reviews for An EggCiting Adventure
lilramalama chapter 1 . 4/30/2011
This was a really funny story! I noticed that you overused "...", though. An example is: -"Guys, what Iris said is right..." Cilan blushed a little... "You can't do anything about it...-. Just saying. This was a little short; you write like me. The end was way overused; don't do that again. Even if you're trying to be funny. Ending it like that: -Even though there was up's and down's, It was still An Egg-Citing Adventure.- is NOT a good thing. The plot was great, however. I'd like to see more stories from you; you seem to be a great author.
ArmoredDragonite chapter 1 . 4/27/2011
hmm well nicely written it was s sweet story :)