|Reviews for Goodbye|
| SeungSeiRan chapter 1 . 4/29/2011
- Descriptions are always a good thing when writing as long as they're well-placed. In this case, the context is quite obvious so I doubt mentioning Jin's 'blood-streaked raven hair' and 'chocolate brown eyes' is necessary.
- In a drabble, you've got to pack a punch in a few hundred words. While your writing isn't bad overall, there were a lot of over-used phrases like the first paragraph and 'the world keeps spinning' etc.
Not a bad drabble but I think you can certainly push yourself a little further.
| Razer Athane chapter 1 . 4/28/2011
(Migraine, forgive short review): Short and sad, well written, and to the point. Good interpretation dude!
| Miana-Mint chapter 1 . 4/27/2011
If that's drabble i wounder what mine sound like this is brilliant and i agree i have wounderd that myself and you brought it over birlliantly i exp like the last part about the walking away from the laughing, and the 'goodbye' almost borught a tear to my eye, i love this its so final and so brilliantly written xx
thank you for moving me