A great idea but there were several grammar issues and I was not a fan of the POV.

Nevertheless it has serious potential and I wish you the best of luck.

Such an underage story.

So far, quite good. How on earth did Draco get into the girls' dorm? Ginny should Petrify him, and then ask Professor Snape to fetch him, since she doesn't know any levitation spells yet. Hey, just trying to be helpful!

You cover quite a bit of ground in this first chapter, but I am looking forward to more. I really like that she's still talking to Percy even after the twins target him so much.

This is like THE best fanfic I've ever read. Out of the like 200 fanfics I've ever read this is the best! Awesome story!

I absolutely love this story, it's very well written (I actually read it all at once, only taking breaks to go to the bathroom).
Sometimes things were quite confusing, like with the time travel, though that's probably because you write a chapter at a time, and you always elaborate later :)
And I felt as if it part 2 has very little basis in part 1 (especially her relationship with Theo).
But honestly, I can only say these things because you asked for pointers, otherwise you wouldn't get more than an 'awesome story' from me.
Keep writing, you're great!

First person's pov that makes the story look even worse than it actually is and a rather poor writing talent. But I am praising your dedication - you'd written a lot.

I LOVED your story. I could not stop reading, every chance I had I had my eyes glued to the screen. You have a wonderful writing style, you really paint a picture woth your words, please keep writing!

I like this one wayyy better that the rewrite so far!

I honestly loved the story up until Ginny went into the muggle world. The plot just seemed dead. Maybe having Tom somehow transfer his diary horcrux into her without both of them knowing would have made it better? There just wasn't a strong antagonist. The beginning however was perfect. I loved how ginny had so much potential and was constantly fighting herself with dark and light compulsions. I cant wait to read the rewrite :) Great job

I really enjoy this story. I've read it all in less than a day so far. I'm a silent reader, and I am sorry for that, but I got too caught up in this story to review properly. I really liked this, and for some reason, always liked the Ginny/Theo pairing. This is a good fic that deals with mature themes in an apropriate manner. I get the feeling that I will reread this in the future.

I threw myself into my classes and I busied myself by writing the essays of other Slytherins.

You mean 'for other Slytherins'?

This was such a good story! It had me scared, excited and so much more that other stories usually don't get out of me. I especially love how you brought out each character's personality more; especially the kids. And it was a Ginny/Theo pairing which is even better! Not much action between them but that's okay.

Loved it! :)

Julie :)

In all honesty, I've always disliked Ginny. Most likely for being a fangirl in the beginning of the books.

But I'm not sure now. Reading about this Ginny, this tragic girl who at last still got her happy end, made me revise my opinion. Really, cannon!Ginny seems decidedly lacking now, with what sparse character development she had (rowling never gave much insight into her personality besides the usual gryffindor traits).

And HarryGinny just seems /wrong/ now somehow. I mean, I've never been a fan, but after reading of all these hardships Theo and Ginny conquered I can't see them with anyone else without grimacing. Well, maybe blaise.

You wrote a wonderful story. Thank you for sharing it with us. :))

this is one of the most epic ginny stories i've ever read
very catchy, very dramatic, no black/white story

i'd love to read your rewritten story too, but i'd guess maybe it would be better if you just wrote a similar, new story instead of rewriting the old one ?
i already love your story the way it is.. :)

Loving this story, can't believe it's almost over! One thing I didn't understand from this chapter is if Selene is not going to Hogwarts until next year, why would she be sworn to secrecy, since she hasn't been through it yet?