|Reviews for From Sunrise to Sunset|
| Emma chapter 2 . 3/22/2013
this is really good i cant wait to read more
please write fast cause this seems really good and i just have to read more
| AmericanHorror420 chapter 2 . 11/16/2011
Oh dear, you left me hanging!
What the hell is that all about!
Please continue with this story :)
| Mellybean23 chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
Um, I really don't want to sound mean, but there are a few things that you should be aware of.
One) Every time someone talks, it should be a new sentance.
Two) you have a few typos here and there, but nothing too serious. Just re read a bit more thoroughly and that should do the trick.
The rest was going to be a short word on historical accuracy, but someone's already told you, so I'll just leave it.
It's not a bad story, it's just not my cup of tea, so to speak. I hope you continue, though, because so many others seem to enjoy it.
| MrsRJLupin chapter 2 . 5/24/2011
A great chapter, I can't wait to find out where this leads. I really like your characterisation, you have a strong character here who knows her own mind and, as a woman, is now thinking with her heart as we girls are prone to do. Of course if she's going to fancy someone she'll hold him in her mind and go quivery at the knees (you can tell that Pierre Gringoire is a bloke, who thinks he knows everything).
A great read, one I'm thoroughly enjoying. I wanted to email to tell you to ignore Pierre Gringoire, he reviewed mine asking me what year mine was in, even though I'd said so in the summary page! He wants accuracy but he knows nothing of tact. Ignore him, you've got plenty of loyal readers already.
| Captain Lucky Jack Aubrey chapter 2 . 5/5/2011
To the reviewer (Pierre Gringoire) below,
While I understand your right to review, I must agree with Rachel on this one. If you don't particularly like an author's story then that's fine but it doesn't give you the right to give them a verbal beat-down. If you must review at all then there are much more polite ways of going about it. For example, if you aren't fond of an author's story then don't simply bash them with every acidic comment you can think of but give them ways of improving. Or, if you feel you cannot word your review in a more decent manner, then don't review at all.
Furthermore, it would be wise of you to consider what consequences your words might have on an author, especially an author who is just beginning to blossom and post their work for others to read. Such as act takes courage and for that alone every author on this site demands some level of respect.
Places like this are for authors to bloom and simply do what they love: write.
To the author (HannahPullings),
Historically accurate or not, your story is very good so far and most certainly enjoyable so please, keep writing and keep doing what you love.
Best of wishes,
| ArturiaBlackandAmadeaWeasley chapter 2 . 5/4/2011
Historically correct or not, it does not give you the right to flame someone's story in such a rude manner. I believe this site gives someone, anyone the right to write about what comes out of their mind, as well as their heart. There are THOUSANDS of stories that could have some misconceptions in them and misused terms in them. I understand (to the person below) that you probably like Master and Commander or not, but to bash the writer's first story was very harsh and impolite. The story is great in my opinion, and I think the writer has very good details in her story. I suggest if you want to flame, go flame somewhere else.
Let a writer, write, and let them blossom. There is no need to put them down. You could've put that in a much nicer way, and a less bashing tone.
But to the writer:
Great story so far, loves, gotta love the men. :)
Historically correct or not, it is a cute fanfiction, and keep up the excellent work!
| Pierre Gringoire chapter 2 . 5/4/2011
Why is the British Navy sending Hannah to spy on Aubrey? There's already a competent agent on The Surprise: Maturin! If the admiralty had doubts about the capacities of one of their captains, they wouldn't send a 23 year old woman who's never been at sea to investigate. They'd ask Maturin, since he actually knows Aubrey! Moreover, why a woman? I can think of a few scenarios where a female agent would be used, but this isn't one of them.
The biggest problem I have with this story is this: Master and Commander is a historical drama. It was extremely historically accurate. This fic is NOT. The characters are not behaving as if they're in the 19th century British navy, they're behaving as if they're on a 20th century cruise ship! 'The dining area'? Really? Also, where were the other midshipmen during the dinner scene? They'd all be eating mess together. Did Calamy and Blakeney kick them out? Wouldn't Aubrey have something to say about that?
One more thing: how good a spy can Hannah be if she falls for Pullings within minutes of meeting him and lets Aubrey get the drop on her?
| ArturiaBlackandAmadeaWeasley chapter 1 . 4/28/2011
Love Jack's little speech in the beginning and the sunset scene at the end. Great start and keep up the good work! I can't wait to see which direction you take this story in.