|Reviews for Little One|
| Gesh chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
I enjoyed these past six chapters very much. Thank you for writing this.
One problem arises, though, with beginning a fanfiction within Harry's first decade of life: He is no longer the kid we love from the series. I am not sure whether it is a good or bad thing, yet, but it does cause trouble for those who are looking for Harry from the series.
It seems you won't have this problem, though, *if* you keep the plot continuous - Harry cannot adjust too quickly to non-Dursley life, for example. I think you're handling this quite well, though.
Best regards, and best of luck,
A very pleased reader
| Sakura Lisel chapter 4 . 5/24/2011
Wait I'm confused. Didn't the summary say that Lily and Severus mended things between them BEFORE Lily was killed? So what's with Severus thinking that he and Lily HADN'T spoken to each other since their 5th year at Hogwarts, and that he had thought Lily basically STILL hated his guts up until he heard the will both she and Potter made?
| musicgal100189 chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
I hope Luc can help Severus after his hangover goes away. That commen you wrote for Severus to say about his drinking and family ties was great. If he was sober Luc probably would have gone through the roof. As for Dumbledore being more evil it seems like you made him mentally unstable a little. If you can blind yourself so completely something must be wrong with your head. Thank you for writing, sorry I can't give you much input besides no spelling mistakes again.
| stallion-ponyta chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
dumbledore is so blind, not all family love their own...refering the dursleys that is
| Myrdreth chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
I like that story :)
| Yashida chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
Very nice story!
And a lovely chapter too.
I however do have one small remark plot-wise. From the way the conversation with Albus is worded, it is all but too clear, almost obvious even, that Severus has been in the Dursleys household before. Now Albus may be very anxious and exhausted at that moment but he's not stupid, he'd get suspicious about the specifics Severus ùmentions with regard to the Dursleys and Harry; if not at the moment itself then definitely later.
To avoid that I'd have Severus use more general descriptions, like the way you had him ask after Harry having a room or not. The way he mentioned the lack of pictures of Harry in the house could be worded in a more general way though, the way it is now one already gets a strong impression he's been there before to notice the lack of pictures himself. And the way he refers to Dudley's size and weight is a dead give away. He should first ask Albus to describe the boy, and then only alow himself to respond to the image Albus gives of Dudley even when this would be too mild or incorrect. Otherwise Albus would definitely know he's seen Dudley before and therefore has been to the house, and as a consequence could possibly have taken Harry. Potter's son or not, Albus does know how Severus felt about Lily after all.
So, I'm just saying that a successful spy like Severus wouldn't allow for even the possibility of any even remotely related suspicion to come his way about anything and thus he wouldn't be this careless with his words.
He'd definitely take the chance to put Albus in his place as you have him do, but not if this would come at the cost of his cover.
Other than that, the chapter was very good.
| MissCHSparkles chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
I hope you don't bash Ron too much, I know he gets jealous but it's because he's so over shadowed by all his brilliant brothers and then feels overlooked because of his younger sister. Plus, despite all the awful things that happen to Harry, a lot of good things happen to.
He got to be youngest Seeker in a century, he seems to get away with a lot of stuff, he has money, an invisibility cloak, can master all these cool spells. So, I think its no wonder Ron gets a little jealous but at least he gets over it and is there for Harry when he needs him.
If you're going to bash Ron, don't just make him this stupid idiot that just blunders about. That's one reason I don't like Ron bashing, they turn him into a special needs kid who's also a jerk and it's just not nice to read at all.
| free-to-fly-2010 chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
I absolutely adore stories like this, where we see a softer, paternal side to Severus. I am truly enjoying reading your story and will be looking forward to your next installment.
| hani chapter 6 . 5/24/2011
Very good chapter , loved the way the story progressing .
| luv-my-pug-roni2010 chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
love plot.. i hope severus and harry can leave safety.. update soon...
| butterflyeyes20 chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
i love your story so far! so cute that harry keeps calling him batman! Can't wait for the next chapter! :)
| Team Jasper 99 chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
I love your chapter. I don't know if Snape would use the Crucio on anyone because he is a good guy and is better than that to stupe that low.
| ggghhhaaarrr67 chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
| krynny chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
love what you are doing it truly rocks. thanks for writing such a wonderful story. you are the bomb.
hugs and kisses
| DarkRavie chapter 6 . 5/23/2011
Another very good chapter. I look forward to reading what happens next in your fic.