Reviews for An Unexpected Place
FireheartNinja chapter 3 . 1/2/2012
I love LXG! I was waiting for a current going story!
Shyguy1 chapter 2 . 7/11/2011
You have a great style. Once again, it feels like u rushed through. Still a great story and I'm still anxiously waiting for what's next. Also, I think that the rushing is just part of your style, so it works for you. You've cleared up a lot of your previous problems. Keep Writing Space Cowboy
Shyguy1 chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
I'll give you a compliment and a constructive criticism. Astounding how you firmly grasped the individual characteristics of each of the characters. I'm very impressed. Their speach patterns (though we have only heard about three or four) completely match the characters as well as their thought patterns. However, the way you present aspects of your story seems to hint at a slightly undeveloped style. You use imagery when required but it seems like you're just stating facts. Its like you're just writing the story, not telling it. Dont just tell facts, add emotion to the writing. Make it feel dark, or happy, or suspenseful. I will definitely be following this story because it promises to be good. Through and through, your idea and your story has great potential and I see it to be one of the best in this sight. Keep Writing Space Cowboy
Teres chapter 1 . 5/8/2011
This looks like it could be really good. I like the twist you're giving to the plot. Happy writing! I look forward to your next update.
Starzilla chapter 1 . 5/7/2011
LXG is one of my fave movies, and this looks promising.