|Reviews for It's only a dance|
| Hawki chapter 1 . 5/10
-“but…but Lin was feeling lonely.
She had good reason to feel lonely she supposed.”
Repetition of “lonely.”
-“Her master, Master Crest…”
And repetition of “master.”
-“Ok then.” Lin said.
Needs a comma rather than full stop. Same issue is repeated further on.
-Anyway, there’s not too much more to say. I can appreciate the structure, but it feels far too short – in less than 500 words, Lin goes from feeling lonely to kissing. Feels like something that needs to be extended out further.
| XV-Dragon chapter 1 . 5/12/2011
Don't know much about the Dark Cloud games, but htought I would check out your non WITCH fics and this one seems pretty could. I might need to try out this game and see what itsl ike as well (that wy I'll know the charactes better I can read future Dark Cloud fics you might write in the future)
| Nightgazer333 chapter 1 . 5/8/2011
I loved it!_
This is nice!_