Reviews for Off to a Pretty Good Start
Ray D chapter 6 . 6/1/2014
You. Are by far. The BEST author I've had the privilege to come across on this site. I love, love, LOVE your stories! There's such a depth to the characters and meaning behind every little thing! And I just ADORE how you have Axel head-over-heels in love with Roxas before Roxas even realizes his own feelings! It's just..GAH! You're awesome! :3
SavageNympho chapter 1 . 2/10/2014
Cute. Very cute. I'm interested to see where it goes. :)

As much as I like yaoi and fan fiction, I feel a little weird writing or reading it, knowing it's mostly 14 year old girls. I know sex is all idealized in fan fiction, but it worries me a little for young girls who really seem to believe that everything will be nice and clean and fun and totally not painful ever. First time always hurts (tho the hurt is depending), and all of the ass play... well...
Poop is in your butt, even when you aren't in fact pooping. In yaoi how people don't screw with a condom on and somehow the entering dude's penis doesn't smell and isn't covered in any poop. They just have sex and go to sleep without really cleaning up much, and then later don't complain that anything stinks or is germy. Even the other person being sweaty or gross or their semen tasting salty and gross is passed over, because they're so hot or so in love already that sex is somehow on miraculous autopilot. No refractory period needed.

Sex was not what I expected it was, but I grew more comfortable with it over time and even now really enjoy it. But it's an awkward journey of self discovery and significant other discovery too, so when people write it like it's some perfect experience right off the bat without even trying, it usually a) makes me wonder if the writer ever had sex (and if not, what they expect sex will eventually be like) and b) feels like the characters missed a major opportunity to learn about each other and themselves, for fear of being unsexy somehow. No one writes Roxas or Axel as fat because it would ruin their pretty-boy image, and very few write them like actual, relatable virgins. But I saw you wrote a drabble about that, and that reassured me a little :)

I really like your stories, but at the same time I feel like there's too much sex. I'm not from the Victorian era here, all repressed and "scandalous!" and all that, but interesting plot developments and characters seem to be kind of glanced over, in favor of some porny scenes that are cute, but usually bring the story to a dead halt. Stories like Rathlin Island (I think it's called) and Reboot Romance; there was more that could have been done in the way of conflict, but it just sort of...ends, leaving only a little bit of pathos to satisfy (Im obviously speaking for myself here. Most others seem perfectly happy with the arrangements as they are currently). You write dudes very well, and yes, a lot of dudes are horndogs, but they are easily thrust into situations where sex is the ultimate problem solver, or they can't say no to sex (and wouldn't want to, even if they could), because it's just that orgasmically amazing.

I'm not troll in here, not trying to get all up in yo grills, it's just the trend I noticed. And just some of me ranting about trends in yaoi fanfics in general that the authors never acknowledge (I can never tell if they know better or if they really are that honestly naive). Meh. Ramble ramble ramble. That's just my honest opinion, but it doesn't do much in the grand scheme of things. Do what works for you and makes you happy. I'll keep on reading, and may be occasionally pleasantly surprised.
KH freak 813 chapter 6 . 11/15/2013
That story was amazing from start to end! I loved it!

Did they eventually clear up EVERYTHING that went on since they first saw each other?
KH freak 813 chapter 5 . 11/15/2013
How sad. I hope things lighten up soon.
KH freak 813 chapter 4 . 11/14/2013
How could Roxas do that? I know that they aren't together, but it just sounds wrong.
KH freak 813 chapter 3 . 11/14/2013
Axel fell from him HARD
KH freak 813 chapter 2 . 11/14/2013
Did Axel fall for Roxas yet?
KH freak 813 chapter 1 . 11/10/2013
Aww this story is so cute. I can't wait to read more!
The Orgasmic Uke chapter 6 . 9/3/2013
Now if that wasn't the sweetest thing! I was worried there for a while but I know how you love those happy endings! The feels got me for a bit and I wondered if Roxas would buck up. Thank GOODNESS for Larx and her drunken spew. I love how you wrote her in this btw. I like when she's a tough girl but a sweetheart deep down. haha and axel's hag. Loved that. As always, a fabulous job dear
Guest chapter 6 . 6/25/2013
over all I love the story, risqué bits and all. you've got the characters well placed and the personalities shine through. I love the accuracy with axel being the one to fall in love first, reminds me of the video game, also I adore how adorable he can be while being a badass the rest of the time. As for Roxas I like how he's more sensible and firm in the relationship. Its like axel is the open affectionately adorable type when it comes to love and though its obvious roxas is falling for axel at least he's got his head on his shoulder. I feel a bit disappointed that we didn't get to see roxas exercise his new "boyfriend privileges" as with you mentioning them before I was looking forward to it. maybe if you read my review could you if its not to much trouble write that bit in cause I feel like something's missing as you kept mentioning it. pretty please with yaoi on top O.O overall I enjoyed the story. keep writing and I hope to read more fics by you with this pairing in the future.
Skyward.Soul chapter 4 . 3/15/2013
I'm reading this story for the millionth time, and I feel horrible because it deserves SO much praise, but I'm shy when it comes to reviewing so..yeah. I love this. I love pretty much everything you write. You have this great style, everything just works so well..and when Roxas was talking about how the guy at the bar had nice arms, I was instantly thinking "Oh, Riku. It's Riku!" But then when they kissed in the bathroom, and how he kept staring into Roxas' eyes, and how Roxas thought he looked a little sad..was he missing Sora? Is that what he was hoping for by kissing Roxas?
MistyDeath chapter 6 . 11/19/2012
I am gushing over this little piece right here, positively gushing. From the beginning I had no idea this was going to end up being so fluffy, and I'm so happy it was! Wonderful job.
WeDidItForTheDead chapter 6 . 8/11/2012
This was absolutely adorable. A bit more sexual than I'm used to, but that isn't neccassarily a bad thing. Actually, having that as part of the plot made it all the more better. It's great seeing Axel as the vulnerable one because that's how it is in canon: Axel teaching and waiting while Roxas figures his shit out (at least in my opinion). You found a way to make their not-so-innocent relationship so darn /cute/. Though I do admit I have nicknamed this story Gay Sex 101 ;) Thank you for writing it.
Eli chapter 4 . 7/12/2012
I just love all of your writing so much. I love how most of the time it's not just sex it's so much more. if that makes any sense XD Anyhow you are freakin talented.
RedWingedPrince chapter 6 . 7/12/2012
2nd time reading- this is definitely one of my favorite stories of yours. You have this ability to warm hearts, and I'm left daydreaming about a love like Axel and Roxas'. Kudos, babe.
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