Reviews for The Forbidden Twins
iloveyugiohGX93 chapter 1 . 10/1/2014
I see a lots of things wrong here. Let's count them all, shall we?

1. This chapter needs more text. At least 1,000 words or more.
2. I don't speak Indonesian.
3. Chat/script format and keyboard dialogue based entries are not allowed. You have been reported and are asked to remove this story from the site.
CKS chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
apa itu kluarga besar bear? sngaja kau? *nge-death glare momo chan*

tp kluarga besar bear sbenernya tak mau lho -3-

- pura2 jd pengawalnya

critanya sih.. bagus x3 cuma... ada typo tuh diatas

"mengingikan" w hrsnya kan "menginginkan"

sorry kalo trkesan uda kyk pro w tp saya emg pro! *dgebukan ama smua author

btw, keep writing momo (HIME-CHAN)
DJ-san chapter 1 . 5/29/2011
Ahahaha *Ngakak pas baca fanfic ini*

Tingkah laku para tokohnya polos bgt. Ngebayanginnya aja mpe ngakak XD XD.

Ok, keep writing & update, Momo! :D