Reviews for Holiday Vacation
Devon the Shipper chapter 1 . 5/13/2011
Not bad... I think I'm gonna like this fanfic. I especially like the vacation scenario when used in fanfiction because it's straight out of the Slice-of-Life genre.

I only saw one error with the continuity and that was the bus part. It makes me wonder if you've ever read the manga or watched the anime because if you had, you would know that the girls take a TRAIN to school, not a bus.

That nitpick aside, this has the makings of a great LS fanfic. Keep up the good work.
kitmaro chapter 1 . 5/12/2011
Hmm, it seems to start fairly well. It's a bit short but quality over quantity. The dialog is good and understandable. Let's see where you go with this. Nice start.
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