|Reviews for My First Voyagers what if?|
| Mrs.Phineas Bogg chapter 1 . 5/16/2011
Cool, you really have such a great idea going here, with Phineas Bogg being able to help save Jeffrey's parents. And I like how you added Susan at the end to bring them to Headquarters and explain the situation. It's wonderful that they know their son is safe (sorta! It is dangerous on Voyages) and at least with Bogg and trying to make history right. I think Bill Jones would make a great teacher at Voyagers Headquarters too. Nice work.
| magentamom chapter 1 . 5/13/2011
There is much to like in this story. Concept is brilliant and moving. Really love that whether his parents live or not, Jeffrey will be a Voyager. And honestly, just taking the parents out of time resolves the whole dilemma, doesn't it? They're alive but not in the timeline, so ...
Some beta reading would help, I think. I was distracted here and there by grammar and just lack of flow.
Nonetheless, I love the idea of this. If there's anything I could do to help, I'd be happy to do so.