|Reviews for Gundam Wing: Journey to a New Battlefield|
| Dante 101 chapter 27 . 3/9
Okay, first off, it's about time that you updated. Second, the story is coming to a close very soon. There's about what, four to five chapters left? That includes the epilogue and a glimpse of the sequel. You took a lot of time to finish this chapter, but it was definitely worth the wait. It's a combination of political/personal issues, romance and military build ups..
Orb is supposed to be a neutral nation that accepts both Naturals and Coordinators and yet, their leaders or to be more specific, the Serians sold them out to the EA, whom they are secretly aligned to. Talk about irony there...
Now Heero and Murrue go into the theory that the pilots of the Strike-Avengers are most probably Child Soldiers and with enhancements to the human body post-birth. It does make sense that there would be major laws banning that sort of thing, with the exception of Coordinators. I have to applaud Heero's deductive ability and his perception on figuring out that sort of thing. Bio-augmentations being performed by the likes of Blue Cosmos, with their fanatical hatred of Coordinators that is a high level of hypocrisy and a all-time low. They don't care how many children they destroy, as long as they get a chance to off the Coordinators, or as many as they can, who cares right?
By the way, in the last chapter, during the debriefing about the Orb Colonies, you mentioned Aisha being in the conversation, yet there was no mention of her during the opening. Was that an oversight on your part?
Oh, go Cagalli and Waltfeld; give it to those double-face sellouts!
Cagalli - As I said earlier, Cagalli gave it to those Serians a good kick in the butt. Also, it's impressive at how she took the intuitive in taking control of Elysium. And then coordinating efforts to aid the refuges in light of the EA attack and getting Elysium back to its feet. What I'm trying to say is that though she's young, Cagalli is showing the signs of the leader that she will become in the future.
Kira - Ever since he returned from the dead with the Freedom in tow, Kira has been going at his opponents with his non-lethal style like in the series. However, the one thing that the series fails in is the negative parts in a fighting style like that. Nobody talks to him about it, which is really weird. However unlike its series counterpart, this one actually goes in depth with the flaws and consequences of Kira not actively trying to kill his opponents in battle or at the very least, going all out in certain extreme situations. His friends and comrades try to talk to Kira about the problems that his new narrow mindset, but Kira refuses to listen to his more practical allies. This time at the aftermath of the Battle of Elysium, the consequences of his fighting style come to him in one of the harshest ways possible, when the Strike-Avengers equipped with the Double Launcher pack attacked the two largest refugee camps, killing many innocent civilians. I don't want to be harsh with this, but what happened to those Coordinator refuges are just as much as Kira's fault than the Alliance. If he fought to kill at the beginning, then that probably wouldn’t have happened. How Kira move forward from this? Will he start to kill again in active battles or will he only go all out under certain circumstances?
And now, Kira may have made a new enemy in the form of Shinn Asuka, though the two meet today as acquaintances, tomorrow they will meet on the battlefield as enemies.
The Serians - It's unfortunate that those two aren't going to be handed justice anytime soon. What with the more important matters taking place in Elysium and assisting the refugees. With everyone else occupied with their tasks, they have plenty of time to cover their tracks effectively. Even if they did have to spare, the others probably wouldn't have enough to charge them with treason. Their portrayal was done effectively. The only satisfying thing was that their plans for dominion of Orb was stopped. And Yuna is such a whiny five year old.
Throughout the majority of this, we have gone more into ZAFT politics and less than that of the EA. In this chapter, you tie up that particular loose end. We actually see why there hasn't been an actual moderate group opposing the EA's stance on complete eradication of the Naturals. The average response would because that Blue Cosmos has such a tight hold on the upper echelons and the major organizations and associations are packed with its members, sympathizers or bribed members that an anti-war opposition would be impossible. But the explanation done by Waltfeld was executed well.
We haven't heard about the CPK in quite awhile and they've been busy. Now with them, the Eastern Orthodox Church and the Vatican have declared a Holy Crusade against Coordinators?! An all out genocidal war. Damn... And if that wasn't bad enough, now other religious extremists are going out of the way to join in as well... The things that strikes out in that is that Jewish groups are participating. Yes, there are hard-core members in there, but you would have thought that genocide would something they would be opposed to, much less the last thing they would ever do. Talk about complete irony...
Waltfeld - The guy's a pretty good leader there. It's amazing at how he's able to manage the military forces of the 3SA. There's his considerable display on military tactics and his analytical input on the actions of both ZAFT and the EA. Along with politics, though he might hate it in general. His plan to have the 3SA to encourage defections in both forces is ingenious but at the same time, they're putting the Orb Colonies at considerable risk. It's one heck of a gamble. One with a potentially huge payoff.
Dream Scene - This was an interesting part you put there... The presentation, along with the unexpected appearance of Treize was a surprising twist. A good move you played there. Treize was right in character. The part of Heero’s ‘victories coupled with his failures' was one of the best parts of this chapter. The 'Wings' part on the other hand. The angel descending from the sky. It was kinda cliché, but it was good with the scene. Plus,, towards the ending, there's actually a little foreshadowing is there?
Natarle & Flay - Those two seem to being doing well since we last seen them in 25. We see more of a change of how they've been earlier on. It may not be said, but Flay does want to get out of the Alliance, at least away from Azrael at best. As for Natarle, she is strongly considering deserting the Alliance after everything it's done in the war, but is powerless to do anything about it. Now Flay is being trained in how to use a gun. Make one wonder why no one tried to shoot Azrael in the original series when he went ballistic. Still, will Flay being able to use a gun serve a purpose in the future? Natarle does realize now that the EA has access to its nuclear arsenal. When Flay finds out what she really gave Azrael. The girl's going to be in a tidal wave of guilt. Also, will Natarle and Flay play an alternative role in the final offensive or not?
Lacus' Concert - Got to say, Lacus really went over the top with that one. It was pretty good. The full extent of her charisma was displayed through her singing. Her voice managed to reach out and touch the hearts and minds of both Coordinators and Naturals. She gave the surviving refugees much needed hope and strength to move past their terrible ordeal. This was an ingenious move. It encouraged defections on both ZAFT and the Alliance to rally to 3SA's cause and strengthen them as a result.
Defectors - Like I said, Lacus' charisma and her singing encouraged battle groups in both ZAFT and Alliance to defect. And her efforts along with Waltfeld's gamble are beginning to payoff. Still, even with the defections of Task Force 11.5 and 22nd TRG, getting to L3 in one piece is no small feat, what with the hard stances both ZAFT and the Alliance have taken towards traitors. It is implied that towards the end of this chapter that more ships defected from both sides. Hope we get to see how much of a fleet they assembled in the next chapter.
In this chapter, your moving up the timeline quite fast towards the endgame here. On and Dearka and Miriallia finally fessed up! Good for them.
Military Buildup - The last parts of the chapter gives us an overview of the militaries on both ZAFT and the EA that will participate in the final campaign. We can only imagine how much of they're bringing into the fight. We know that ZAFT has almost 5000 capital ships, but that probably isn't the total number. How much does both sides have? The way that both ZAFT and the Alliance have been restocking their forces is as fast and simple as in strategy games. The massive number of losses they've both suffered seems to barely scratch the surface on how much both sides really have.
Sutherland and Bernard - It's been quite sometime since we've seen those two. Those two haven't changed. For Sutherland, the guy is annoyed that Azrael, a civilian is on his flagship even if he's the head of Blue Cosmos. As for Bernard, given how he lead the attack force in Africa and who knows what else since then, he would've gotten a promotion.
Anton Kupchenko - The Head of ZAFTs Special Operations for Patrick Zala, the mastermind who help created the Avalon-battle station and one of the best pilots in ZAFT finally makes an appearance. Given his name, I would assume that he would have to be Russian at best, right? A good look into his background and his character at best. Since how Special Operations' members are in the organization for its ideology rather than its actual level of competence, Anton undoubtly has disdain towards Naturals, more along the lines of the genocidal scale. Still, it has to stick into his craw that Avalon was destroyed by one mobile suit. lol.
Biological CPUs - More of them are going to be participating in the final battle. The question is how many more? As for
| Tahkaullus01 chapter 27 . 3/8
Interesting dream sequence. Can I therefore assume that Wing Zero Custom is going to make an appearance before the end or are we saving that for a potential sequel of the Destiny variety?
Also really liked this chapter where everyone just unwinds. They know what's coming and as such are enjoying what time they have. The threat is always lingering in the background but isn't brought to the forefront until the chapter's end. And can I just say that I feel their terror at the odds they're facing? I mean for crying out loud they haven't even unveiled GENESIS yet and the situation looks bleak for the three ships alliance already. And this is coming from a gundam veteran who's watched SEED and Wing enough times to tell both storylines backwards consecutively so thanks for reintroducing that feeling of impossible odds to a guy who knows how the story ends.
I suppose what I'm trying to say is this: NEXT CHAPTER! ASAP!
| EpyonZero23 chapter 27 . 3/7
Really took you a lot of time to finish this chapter, but the diversity of topics discussed here was definitely worth the wait. It’s collection of political/personal interests, romance and military strength buildup for the final stages of the war. Like what you’ve said, this is the last ‘calm before the storm’ as the heroes and villains of the story clash for the fate of mankind on the next chapters.
The Traitorous Seirans – It is understandable why the father and son duo is yet to meet their due here. There were a lot of pressing matters on the state of the colony, particularly the refugees. We see the normal reaction that could be expected on a tragedy or a calamity. Special response teams, not only from Elysium but also from the 3SA have lent their support to provide medical aid on the refugees. This allows the Seirans to cover their tracks as Cagalli and the others are focused on their efforts to rebuild the damage done to the colony. I think the portrayal of the Seirans was done effectively - they are irritating to the eyes and I am no less than looking forward to reading a painful end for their treachery.
Dream Sequence – Hmm… you’ve expanded here a lot. The presentation was superb and Treize’s inclusion was a very good move. His analogy of Heero’s ‘triumph paired with failure’ was I must say the best part of the entire chapter. Hands down, for me at least, their talk was the finest moment for Journey 27. I could only smile and slightly shake my head in understanding when you got to the ‘Wings’ part. Kudos on your work here – Murrue’s representation as an angelic entity (depicting Heero’s deliverance) was the icing of the cake.
Lacus Concert – Really, this was nostalgic for me, it reminded me of Lynn Minmay’s concert in Macross ‘Do You Remember Love?’ the movie. The power of Lacus’ charisma through singing was shown here. Here voice was able to reach out and inspire a lot of people (both Coordinator and Natural). She was able to give hope and strength to the refugees massacred on the last assault. The inclusion of this to the chapter was ingenious. It motivated Alliance and ZAFT battle groups to defect and rally for her cause as well as strengthened the resolve of our main cast.
Kira’s Realization – Ahh, finally, the long awaited moment for the protagonist I hated the most in SEED Canon. Objectively looking into this… boy, the failures that alluded to this character’s decline into nothing but a self-righteous, messiah complex, idealist was finely addressed on this story. Killing people is not something that the members of the main cast are invigorated to do. They ‘had’ to do it because they ‘must’ or else other (or a lot of) people (military or much worst – civilians) will pay the consequences of such hesitation. The time wasted on ensuring the enemy is not killed, hence, no blood is spilled on his hands is a price that the civilian population had to compensate for Kira’s pathetic outlook. The presentation of the problem and its eventual conclusion here was excellent, though sadly, a lot of dead civilians had to pay for it before the issue finally got knocked into his closed insight.
Military Strength – The later stages of the chapter gave us an overview of each side’s respective military force that they’ll be fielding on the final battle(s). This is something I look forward to reading since I am able to at least visualize in my imagination the number of ships that will participate on the biggest engagement in Journey SEED’s history. My only comment though – I am all good and eager when it comes to such a huge fight, but I really can’t help but feel that the way ZAFT and the Alliance replenish their forces is a fast and simple as producing new units in real-time strategy games. The losses they have suffered over the past months only took their toll in terms of the number of surviving veteran soldiers that they have. But as far as armaments are concerned – the losses accrued seemed to have barely scratched the surface of the ZAFT and the Alliance stockpile.
I think that’s it! On another note, you’ve successfully convinced me that Kira and Flay would be the better match as far as character development, plot relevance and personal experiences are considered. Summing it up, chapter 27 allowed the reader a nice view on all significant character standpoints before the final clash that would determine the fate of the story. This would indeed be the ‘final reprieve’ prior to the firestorm that would engulf the destiny of mankind.
Oopps, I think I’m forgetting something… what was that… ah… yes, The Big Elysium Date. Someone’s going to get really mad if I forget to cover that. Ok, it’s a very elaborate and elegant date that Murrue was able to come up with thru a little (actually, a huge) help from her quite powerful friends (courtesy of Lacus and Cagalli). It was utterly romantic, anyone would really appreciate the amount of effort and suspense Murrue labored with to get the job done. Though with this comment also comes a downside – because it was so romantic (you dress up, ride a limo service, VIP-exclusive arrangements on a nice place and you get to dance with your special someone while the most influential and inspiring entertainer serenading you both on the background), the next thing anyone would be expecting after getting swept off from their feet would be a proposal and that shiny ring. It was awesome and thoughtful, maybe it was a fitting reward for Heero always saving the day and of course a good returning-the-favor for that makeshift date he gave her a couple of chapters ago. However, I still like their date back in Journey 23 better, Heero’s thoughtfulness was truly out of the box and though it was simpler, it felt more intimate.
Just my two cents my friend. ;-)
| Endlos Nacht chapter 27 . 3/5
I want to say Thank you Trieze. I never thought of it that way when it came to Heero Yuy's past battles. It was worth the wait and now I anxiously await the next installment.
| MS-16 Z Jaeger chapter 27 . 3/4
'The Final Solution' eh? I always knew Azrael was a closet Nazi. A closet Nazi with hilarious dialogue in the show, but still a Nazi.
As for the song choice for the nuclear test... very appropriate. Sent a chill down my spine it did. The end game is near.
On another note, just how strong is the force that the TSA has gathered? I know you only showcased a single defection, but it's implied that there are more than just the one. Unless I'm wrong.
Til next time.
| Raximus chapter 27 . 3/4
Good a lot of interesting stuff in a ch.
| MEleeSmasher chapter 27 . 3/2
I like this, although I want to see the Seirans get theirs.
| Cloves chapter 27 . 3/2
I'm glad that your still updating this. Been a while huh? Man you sure did great with this chapter, i enjoy all the scenes that you come up with this chapter. Good luck and ill be looking forward for the next chapter.
| MEleeSmasher chapter 21 . 3/1
I enjoyed this chapter so much. BEST CHAPTER OF THE STORY!
| lemartes chapter 27 . 3/1
The was an amazing chapter and can't wait to see what happens next.
| matthew116 chapter 27 . 3/1
I missed you. any way ill try to keep this short. excellent chapter good stuff. four white wings on murrue and then thinking about them on wing zero! seeting it up for... wing angel? wing gundam white wing?
| Zero The Fallen Angel chapter 27 . 3/1
Nice chapter. and grats on your 1million word keep it up
| gundamzbd36 chapter 27 . 3/1
whats going to happen next?
| Robert001 chapter 27 . 3/1
Thank whoever it is up there! I've been waiting for an update for this fanfic for a long time and I must say it was a very satisfying read! I like how you structure the the calm after the storm scenarios and give each character the right amount of space for the big picture. This really leaves a good chunk for us to see the developements that is happening as well as the different points of view from the main characters to the side characters. That I really like. Though I might have a bit of a problem with the constant reminder of the love that has grown between Heero and Murrue; yes we know they are together now but for I may see a bit of exageration in it though I still enjoy parts of it.
I also appreciate the cameo of Treize, it was well depicted and you captured that dangerous and calculating intelligence that the man had. It was also a good reminder of the place where Heero came from. Another thing I want to give you praise for is the way you built the universe around the story. To me it seems that you created a good balance between the cannon story of Gundam Seed and your own route that you created specifically for the story. That I think shows the great dept that you put in your work so yes very well done sir!
The wish that I have now is that since Heero has officially given his trust to his new friends and allies, because you already covered up the emoutiional changes that he is going through; it would be nice of him to tell them more about himself and the other gundam pilots and their gundams. He already gave them a small summary of his world but he still left out a good deal of information that would be interesting for the other characters of Seed universe. He does not need to give them information on how to create gundanium alloy, but it is good to settle on the pilots and the spec of their gundams. What this does is to promote some reactions from the others as well as create a good picture of the differences between Wing and Seed. That is my only concern but let's see what will happen in the next chapter.
I have to say thank you for the update and keep up the good work. It is much apreciated that one of the best fanfics on this site has not been abbandoned and is still going on. Even if it takes more than a year for the next update, I am still going to follow your work man. Good luck with the next chapter!
| Diablo Snowblind chapter 23 . 1/21
Twenty-three chapters in, I feel like this story would be much, MUCH better if you were more concise as a writer. I don't even know where to start on this. You pad almost every sentence, every passage, with unnecessary words and paragraphs. You're too verbose. People don't talk in entire paragraphs to one another except in rare cases. The actual amount of plot and character development I'm seeing in this story does NOT call for almost a million words of exposition. Everything you've done in this story, could have been done in half the words - at least - without losing anything particularly essential.
Your chapters are far, far too long as well. Their sheer length makes it a complete pain in the ass to find my location again after taking a break, switching computers, reloading the page, etc.