Reviews for Sick
Pokefan291 chapter 5 . 6/8/2012
What do you mean by 'lemons'?
rqgenevieve chapter 2 . 4/11/2012
Hmm, I think this versions actually better than the first one

BUT I'll ask you, can you pretty pretty pretty pretty please with a cherry on top make the pairing Suoh and Nokoru be togehter :3

I'll be SUPER DUPER happy if you do ;]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]

Keep on writing, I'll be cheering for you!

,

Raquelle
rqgenevieve chapter 1 . 4/11/2012
Aigoo You should have the good old Nokoru and Suoh pairing; I LOVE them together :]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]]

And good story so far, it has good details, and moves at a reasonable pace.

Keep it up, I'll be rooting for you!

,

Raquelle
James Birdsong chapter 4 . 9/10/2011
It seems cute and fine. It seems good. It seems okay. Maybe seems wonderful.
James Birdsong chapter 2 . 7/31/2011
Um anyway a story with Nagisa or Utako surely good. My favorite character is Midoriku. Episode 17 has Miyuki and her pet ferret Yuzuriha.

If you were wondering if my other character Alice is a Mary Sue the answer is a big no seeing as she is a lot like Momoko Ryugasaki of Kamikaze Girls. Alice does not want friends nor need friends. So of course generally disliked. Thought a freak by Joe and Jane Average. Remember my comparison to Alice of Wonderland fame and of course usual detective "defect" of antisocial personality. Pessimism maybe or just plain fact she is not going to go against her heart. No masks. Alice always follows her heart and doesn't care if it is unpopular nor "wrong" to others. Yes I can imagine only Nokoru her semifriend. Think lolita like Midoriku. Indeed.
James Birdsong chapter 1 . 7/29/2011
The important part is to hug close whatever it is you love and draw from that if you can. I am obsessed with Alice in Wonderland and Cardcaptors. I really like Clamp School Detectives, Clamp School Paranormal Investigators, Gosick, and Princess Tutu. I care oodles for the Revolutionary Girl Utena anime (show not movie) and I like some of Case Closed. I've also enjoyed the xxxHOLiC anime and most of the Tsubasa Chronicle anime. Some people like Ranma 1/2. I do. My point is I really love shoujo. I like reading mysteries too. What is it you like? What would you like to see in a Clamp School Detectives fanfic? I don't know if my advice can help draw out ideas but oh well.
James Birdsong chapter 3 . 7/29/2011
I see. Well one idea is to use characters and/or elements of Clamp School Paranormal Investigators. Another idea is to rewatch Clamp School Detectives anime with pen and notepad nearby for any ideas, if any, that pop in mind. Could be questions, could be musings, could be poems. Not sure if any daydreams or epiphanies shall come but it is possible. I myself for a very long time have daydreamed of an other character named Alice Pleasance who looks like Alice (from the Alice in Wonderland anime by Nippon). A detective who attends Clamp School. Think of a cross between Sherlock Holmes and Disney's Alice (the 1951 animated film not the 2010 Burton movie).
Lady Error chapter 2 . 7/28/2011
Well, if I said I too dont have any idea, hahaha, then dont need to input this review then. :) I understand how you feel, at some point, writes really are running of ideas, actually, I have some ideas, but dont know you'll like it or not. You can make Akira's illness is getting any better, but then Suoh suddenly got an emergency call from his family regarding his siblings or whatsoever, leaving the poor sick Akira alone with his troublemaker Kaichou. You can imagine how things will be a big mess, trusting the household in the hands of the youngmaster of Imonoyama. Eventually, sick Akira must let himself handle things on his own, eventhough he is sick. Quarrel happens between them as Nokoru insists not letting Akira work, and Akira insists not letting their home as messy as a car wreck. So on...

Well just an idea... I'm sure you can add better ideas or even find an idea on your own.
Lady Error chapter 2 . 7/26/2011
Good job! It's exactly what I imagine if those three were living together... Nokoru will stay as the youngmaster, cant do the household properly, and suoh... Yeah... He'll the one who will be responsible cleaning the mess his kaichou will possibly make. Btw, is it ending? Please dont make it end there... I can imagine more funny scenes can take place in this cute story... Keep it up, and it doesnt have to be a pairing story if you dont like it (even though, I wish I could read some, hahaha), anyway please continue and I will read it. Thanks!
James Birdsong chapter 2 . 5/20/2011
Good work
Ocean Starfly chapter 2 . 5/16/2011
-fangirl squee- I've been scrounging the internet looking for CCD fanfics so I was super excited when I saw that there were more on here. (I promise I'm working on mine, it'll get up here soon! School is almost over!)

This is really cute! I like how you wrote the interactions of the characters, although Nokoru feels a little too clumsy. Akira is adorable and Suoh is Suoh. X3 I absolutely love the ending, too. XD Poor Nokoru.

There were a few grammar mistakes - when speaking, use a comma instead of a period whenever "he said" or whatever comes after what was said. For example, "I'm fine," he said.

Well-written, though it could use improvement. Since it focuses on Nokoru's thoughts, I think it could use more of his thoughts (if that makes sense). When writing from first person POV you really have to think the way they do and describe the world around them the way they would think about it in their head, only with more words since most people don't think in complete sentences. It's a difficult POV because real people don't think about the things they see everyday but you have to introduce their world to the reader. You also have to keep the story flowing using their internal thoughts to get the story across.

Keep up the good work! I think the second version is better.