|Reviews for The Deconstruction of Haruhi Suzumiya|
| spaser79n chapter 2 . 6/1
Awesome! It's amazing how you managed to write a complete story that basically fit itself neatly into the timeline of the light novels. Very satisfying. Good writing too, although I would've liked to see Kyon saying "yare yare" or at least "good grief" (as it's translated in one of the English editions), but eh, I got the idea.
| Ado Edem chapter 2 . 5/27
I'm impressed. Masks and misdirection is a large part of the Haruhi Suzumiya series and were rarely able to get incite into their true thoughts and feelings. As the narrator we get to see Kyon's mask come off-but as Kyon is an unreliable narrator and openly admits his bias its hard to tell. And as you mentioned Haruhi herself only lets her mask down away from others or when she feels they aren't paying attention. and we get to see some of Nagato's growth as a person and her own view of things especially in Disappearance.
The way each of them attempt to help Kyon is interesting too, Mikuru can do nothing but stay by his side, Haruhi tries to act like everything is normal but in the end gives up but manages to create a change in Kyon. Nagato tries to silently help him but backs off when it appears to hurt him, and Koizumi uses his original method of showing him Espers duties and abilities.
I'm assuming the "Deconstruction" refers to the SOS Brigade loosening their masks in one way or another which is almost an antithesis for what the series stood for?
| Ryan Erik chapter 2 . 3/24
Lovely. The narrative is excellent. I wrote several stories like this back when Memento came out, but this is probably the best no short term memory story I've read. It meshes well with the Haruhi plot line and maintains a certain status quo by the end. Nice work.
| Blinded in a bolthole chapter 2 . 10/31/2014
It was a fun read.
| Jaff chapter 1 . 5/18/2014
I am not one to review things but this was beautiful. The characterization and the reactions of the characters worked really well in bringing the feelings. I swear I felt my eyes watering at that last scene between kyon and haruhi in his room. Very good work here!
| YoungKidStories chapter 2 . 4/2/2014
Whoa. I just spent the last few hours reading this, and it was amazingly awesome. Hell, it could even be an actually entry in the series. I give this story a 10/10, and I give you a good old thumbs up. Keep up the awesome work, you might become a proper author.
P.S. I know that you write to express yourself and to provide yourself with a form of therapy, but I honestly think that you have the potential to become a full-blown writer.
| Alfonso Ling chapter 2 . 4/1/2014
I really liked this story. At first I thought it was annoying as hell but I'm glad I hung in there. I see now that this annoyance was shared by everyone in the SOS Brigade, especially Haruhi. Great execution of the whole Memento theme.
| lepolemicist chapter 2 . 3/31/2014
Solid characterization as always. Excellent technical handling of both retrograde and anterograde amnesia.
Don't give up on writing Insight - as authors, it's sometimes easy to be overly critical of one's writing, but I sincerely feel that Ephemeral is one of the best stories I've read. It is a rare talent to be able to portray emotions in a subtle way - to show and not merely tell readers about the characters' emotions - and to capture that mix of uncertainty and passion that real emotions are made of.
I look forward to your the next update!
| Renascent chapter 2 . 3/30/2014
I forgotten this was a rewrite as I read it throughout the day, so I had treated this as I would any other story.
Anyway... Amnesia? Not the most original centerpiece of a story's premise ever but it doesn't mean it could be has to be as inconsequential as every other time it's employed.
Reading it through, I thought the style was very... convincing in it's attempt to replicate that of the light novels, as I can recall them. When Kyon was not experiencing immediate grief or sadness, his aloof attitude was usually present.
As it turns out, the amnesia use was stellar. You managed to capture both the frustration of both Kyon and his friends, by both repeating previously revealed information and the inclusion of new information while acting as if they had been there for a while now.
That was annoying for the characters and us readers are lucky enough to share that miserable experience. But that was part of that point.
Almost reaching the second half of the second chapter, I thought this story to be somewhat less ambitious than something I would expect from you but I would soon see how wrong I was.
I thought Haruhi's speculation that maybe Kyon would "prefer not knowing" anything was a home-run. And then, of course, there's the part where Kyon gives his notepad to Haruhi.
Kyon's amnesia, it's true significance was to give Kyon freedom.
Freedom from having to be some kind of mediator between Haruhi, reality, and the supernatural factions.
Everyone pitching in to attempt to bring his memories back, you had a few interesting choices there, especially Nagato's.
I thought that his memory coming back the way it did was a little too predictable but it really was the only way MoSH would go. The only faithful ending I can think of.
So, all in all, a stunning work, as long as one has the patience to allow all the pieces fall into place. And also very faithful to the light novels.
| Anmynous chapter 2 . 3/30/2014
It was wonderful!
And the reminders to Kyon worked great on me as a reader who had forgotten the first chapter, funnily enough.
I did feel that Haruhis wording was awkward at times, but it also seemed like something right oui of the novels, so I suppose it's fine anyway.
| flairina chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
Truly surprised at the lack of reviews; deserves more to be sure. Very well written and I was quite invested right through the end. Well done!
| Steven P. P chapter 1 . 2/12/2013
This was an incredibly well written story, well-deserving to be placed among the TvTropes fic recommendations. ;) You did a fantastic job with Kyon's narration and also with his amnesia - I loved how you were able restart a scene over and over without sounding the least bit repetitive. Thank you for this great read! :D
| Lily chapter 1 . 11/9/2012
Wow, you really do deserve more reviews. I've come across quite a few amnesia-fanfics in my day, and I have to say this one is by far the best! You should really give yourself a pat on the back for writing this.
I just love the fact that he kept forgetting all the time, and all the repeating defenitly fits this fandom somehow. And Kyon's character (and everybody else's to) were really spot on. And I really liked the ending with the costumes. And yeah... Sleeping beauty indeed. ;)
| Woobie chapter 1 . 6/25/2012
Haruhi hitting Kyon when he was already hurt was very scary and mean of her. It is good that she was nice to him afterward and he will not ever know she did it.
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
This was a great story I loved it! The characters were written perfectly and the grammar was actually good! The concept was awesome and the story and narrative were amazing! Definitely one of the best haruhi fics I've read.