Reviews for Online Connections
Krusher chapter 4 . 2/21
"Fill her holes" lmfao
JustAnotherTypicalBastard chapter 16 . 8/15/2015
Really great story, highly enjoyable.
The Great Fanfiction Wizard chapter 16 . 10/15/2014
Good story loved it!
Green-Changeling chapter 16 . 8/28/2014
This is my favorite Teen Titans fan fiction, I have read it twice and just got around to finding it again today. Even reading it a third time I loved it and I really enjoyed everything about the story.
beacuzz chapter 7 . 2/20/2014
I think your "girl talk" is quite accurate
just don't tell any other girls i said that. it is a girl code secret that we aren't crazy girly psychopaths when you boys aren't around.
Weird Beard chapter 1 . 2/7/2014
Fun story. You know, I've been reading a few "Raven learns she likes video games" stories, and besides one other Zelda story, this is the only one where the author did something as obvious as finding a game style that fits her personality, rather than just have her suddenly master racing or FPSing.
TomMaier chapter 16 . 12/10/2013
Great story! What Xbox games do you have?
Anna chapter 16 . 10/13/2013
I was browsing an author's favorite stories and stumbled upon this story. I know it has been over two years since it has been finished, but I wanted to say awesome story!
Lirael1 chapter 16 . 10/12/2013
That was an adorable story! I really enjoyed reading it, and the ending (especially the part with the team posing for a photo) made me smile. :)
TJS Tiger chapter 6 . 9/27/2013
I AM LOVING THIS STORY YOU CAME UP WITH! I almost wish I came up with it myself! Love Rae/BB! Thanks for making it!
Guest chapter 15 . 9/17/2013
Beast boy and reven forever boyaa
Guest chapter 11 . 9/17/2013
You evil beast boy but still second fav next reaven
Guest chapter 1 . 9/17/2013
You are so beast boy I know it I just do bb
TheMindGamer chapter 6 . 5/17/2013
Well, that was surprising. I didn't expect an identity to be revealed so early. Normally, it goes on for a while, so kudos for subverting that.

I'm gonna touch on some concept level problems in this review. I'm just gonna take an excerpt and comment from it.

"Starfire looked puzzled, 'Tell me friends, is Beast Boy going to challenge the villain Gizmo to a duel of the video games?"

I only included this line because I thought it felt pretty in character. I have a tendency to focus entirely on the negatives.

"'Not exactly, Star.' Cyborg explained, 'We only need BB to locate him within the game and keep him occupied long enough for me to get a trace on him. The trace should allow me to locate the Hive's position within the city by back tracking through his IP address.'"

Okay, this isn't necessarily an issue, but I feel like I should point out that this doesn't really make any sense. It's not a titanic stretch insofar as comic storylines go, so it isn't gonna be breaking anyone's suspension of disbelief, but you don't trace IP addresses like phone lines. Once you have someones IP, it's just a matter of calling the ISP up and asking who has it, presuming they're willing to cooperate. I realize that dynamic IPs can cause an issue, but they're also presuming he isn't using a proxy, anyway, so it's not a foolproof plan either way. Furthermore, dynamic IPs really don't change that frequently.

"Raven remained silent as Robin spoke up again, 'Beast Boy, since you're already familiar with Darkest Nights, we will start the search there.'"

Why? Was I to be under the impression that this game was popular? If I was, you never established that well. Furthermore, isn't it just throwing darts in the dark? There's no guarantee he's playing.

"Beast Boy seemed to be in deep thought before answering, 'We're going to need some help tracking Gizmo down in a large game like that. Also, if I'm defeated by him, I'll be forced back to a town, only having to restart the whole search."

Okay, sure, but isn't it easier to just call the company who hosts the server? I'm sure once you're certain he's in the database, it's easy to get his last known IP. Or at the very least an online/offline status and location. You could do this with a bunch of companies simultaneously, too.

"'What do ya have in mind B? Should we all start up some accounts to help ya out?' questioned Cyborg as he stared at his green friend."

No comment. Seems reasonable enough, considering the plan.

"He didn't hesitate in answering, 'No if we're doing this, it needs to be someone I can trust that is equal to me in experience. Right now I'm playing with a sorceress who would be a great help. Our styles are different enough to tackle anything...'"

As far as I'm aware, they've only been playing for an afternoon. This lends two notions. First, they're low level. It's hard to level in MMOs. Even in ones that are easy to level in, it takes at least a week of heavy play to max it. Even if the game's new, the first "no lifer" they run into is gonna wipe them clean. Chances are, the game isn't that new, however. The boy in the cafe in from chapter 2 was playing this game, correct? It's at least a two days old. It's likely far older.
The second notion is why does he trust her? He's known her for around an afternoon. That's not long enough to build any substantial trust. I'm surprised Beast Boy doesn't want his guy friends helping him over some person he just met.

Basically, this whole plan is pretty bad. There are numerous places it can go wrong, and it's fairly obviously a way to strong arm some sort of conflict into the gaming environment. It's possibly a way to strong arm an identity reveal, as well. The only way to fix any of this is to put it back in the figurative oven. It needs more thought.

Also, for the record, "gamertag" is a microsoft thing. I think you should be using either the terms "Username," "profile name," or probably best "pseudonym."
TheMindGamer chapter 5 . 5/17/2013
No big reprises in this chapter and nothing new, so I don't have much major to focus on. I'll take this opportunity to focus on something a bit more overarching.

I've sort of noticed that the way you've written the characters makes them all seem really young. I actually find it somewhat cute. It's almost like I'm reading Tiny Titans or something, but I don't think this was intentional. Their thoughts are all very simple and short. They're supposed to be teenagers, but this causes them to sound more like grade schoolers. Beast Boy seems about nine or ten. Raven, perhaps twelve.

This can be remedied by just remembering that each idea isn't just that. Every notion a character has comes with a host of implications and suggestions. Thoughts aren't very divided- they build and morph. When a thought isn't followed through or developed, it seems childlike and simplistic.

One thing from this chapter, though:

"He was told that there was a slayer attacking innocent players. The "slayers" were traitorous players that chose to support the Darkspawn. Few players choose to become one because doing so would mean seclusion from all good players and have no access to communities within the game. Darkspawn would tempt them over with promises of dark power that normal players could not enjoy."

This makes no sense - at least from a design perspective. Part of the appeal of an MMO is, well, being a massive and multiplayer. It'd be pretty counterproductive to have this slayer system implemented if it cuts contact between players. It would probably be more like a faction system, in reality. Depending on the climate of the game, though, even if it worked the way you described, it'd actually be favorable to the player to switch. So far there hasn't been any advantages to being a normal player. One of the easiest ways to get players to join a faction is to allow them to get obvious advantages from it. While the situation you describe isn't entirely impossible, it's one of the less likely scenarios and requires a bad design model.
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