|Reviews for The Last Yagami Child|
| happyteddybear96 chapter 13 . 1/13
Hello, I like the idea you have, but there are many things I don't understand. For example, why is Near investigating the Kira case if L is still alive? It's not necessary, plus I can see Mello doing this, not Near. I find it hard to believe that L wouldn't have heard about Near leaving and that he was so willing to let him help. Also, L having a daughter doesn't make sense. I just don't believe that it would happen. Even if he did, it'd make sense to have her at Wammy's House so she'll be safe. For most of the story, Light is not there, just mentioned. You don't let on to what point of the Kira investigation's at till later on. That was confusing since I didn't know how much information they knew. There should be scenes of them working on the case too. I like the paring of Near and Sayu and that their relationships not rushed. That's it and I hope I didn't offend you.
| Writer-san chapter 13 . 1/10
It's nice to see an update :)
I do hope of more updates :D
| WildfireDreams chapter 13 . 1/8
cant wait to read more!
| Awesomenesss-sama chapter 13 . 1/8
I think I've said this before, but you know not every chapter needs to have a big event to seem interesting. Heck, I was interested in the contents of the Shinigami mythology book.
Also, Elle and L? Dear satan, "Elle" sounds like a r34 version of L, not his love interest XP
Thanks for updating, it's got me thinking about my own Death Note fanfiction that I should be writing. Haven't updated in months. I wonder if my readers have missed me XD
| Writer-san chapter 12 . 8/22/2015
Yay and update! So I'll get to it straight away now. Hmm...I think Light's smile just now was some kind of mental attack on Sayu? I'll just assume she knows something buy damn! Sayu has been touching the book over and over! Did I forget something from the Canon? Oh well.
Then...the Laine woman again. Meh, just meh on her now. I can't wait on how you will pull off L's death...or not. Plot twist somehow? So much possibility!
8/10 for this chapter :D
| Awesomenesss-sama chapter 12 . 8/21/2015
I know the feeling. My inspiration to write has been gone for about two weeks and I find it very worrying, I can't even get a word down now...instead, that inspiration has been funneled into drawing. I still can't draw very well, and I'd very much prefer to go back to writing, but what can you do? *shrug*
| WildfireDreams chapter 12 . 8/20/2015
Wow so glad you updated! I almost forgot about this one. Can't wait to read more!
| Writer-san chapter 11 . 8/8/2015
If you don't mind...could you update this? Seeing it's like...May since it last updated? Right so onto the review. I actually marathoned this for like...the entire midnight and I must say, cute pairing. So, I love the "build up". Near and Sayu's relationship isn't going too fast but not at a turtle pace either. Then there's the difference of Sayu's " smarts". She's technically having her smarts at a rate of 7/10 here right? Seeing in cannon it was only 3/10. Good job on this part. Oh and some Oc's fitted huh? I'm cool with this. But I had a little bit of trouble of the ages but no probs now. So I'm assuming Near is in the age of when he first started the case in the canon right?
Odd considering Sayu is suppose to be older but like I said,I'm cool with this. Oh and Elle? I like but I ain't to fond of her mom. Then therr's Hitomi...maybe he has a thing for L?
Oh and the whole sharing info thing between L, Elle and NearSayu, the threeway thing is a wee bit dangerous. Especially when Sayu and Near founded the hidden drawer. Dangerous game there. I assume Sayu and the "strange shadow" thing? I assume is Ryuk sooo...dun dun duuuuunnn. Light keeping tabs huh?
Oh I do want to see how this plays out. Assuming it's maybe around that time, Misa's appearence means L's death is looming about yes? Or maybe a change of events?
And maybe if you follow canon, Sayu's kidnap plus the news of Light being Kira might affect her mental state? Wow so much possibility!
All in all sorry for the long revirew. Actually I had more in mind but I'll just let it slide cause...I forget XD
I rate 9/10. Seriously, UPDATE!
| Guest chapter 11 . 5/7/2015
Great story. I can't wait to see more!
| WildfireDreams chapter 11 . 5/2/2015
...Stayed up till almost 7am rereading this so too tired to really review, cant wait to read more!
| Awesomenesss-sama chapter 11 . 5/1/2015
XxXMorganXxXLEAHXxX-sensei! You're alive! Guess what! That story that this one inspired me to write is being rewritten! I just put chapter two up last night! I hope you read and review, because its gotten better too! I still have to get to deleting the original (I really can't bring myself to do it), but you'll find the new one under The Sister's Point Of View Rewrite. If you can, could you also help me with a new not-so-long title? I've been asking a lot of people for some ideas, and I think I'm gonna put all my favorites into a poll for the final decision.
| Guest chapter 6 . 10/27/2014
Good story but the continuity errors are getting to me. For one thing, which country is this taking place? Light and his family are Japanese, they live in Japan. The series mainly takes place in Japan. Sayu ears shouldn't just pick up when hearing Japanese nor should she only use the language sometimes. Japanese is her mother tounge, she shouldn't be speaking anything else! And there is no way the school will let Near enrol without parental guardianship or without a full name! Near enrolling on his own can be overlooked but the teachers wouldn't call him Near, unlike canon, is just a foreign kid who should be fluent in Japanese if he is able to communicate fully with everyone. Near needs a first and last name to enroll! And how old is L? He was pretty young in canon but since he has a daughter, I can assume you've aged him? And when is this taking place? The Yotsuba arc? If that's the case, then Light has no memory of being Kira and there is no Death Note in his possession
| Raidriar chapter 1 . 9/7/2014
Sayu's as clever as Kira? Interesting. I'm looking forward to reading about this
| Awesomenesss-sama chapter 10 . 8/31/2014
Yay! Thank you for the update XxXMorganXxXLEAHXxX-sensei! I know, I haven't reviewed this story before, and I really should have, this story inspired me to write my own Near/Sayu fic similar to this one, which is why I'm glad I found this when I did, if I found this after you finished it then the plotlines would be almost identical, even now I'm changing it in as many ways possible, but I think I'm getting to close, could you read it and tell me if I did something wrong please? It would be very much appreciated Sensei!
| Akemi-chan chapter 1 . 2/12/2014
Please update! It's a really goo story and I'm dying to read more!