|Reviews for A Demon's Realization|
| sexy demon neko ciel chapter 1 . 6/12/2013
Cute I loved it
| Yaoifangirl666 chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
I LOVED IT! So fluffy please do more:)Xxxx
| DattebayoUrie01 chapter 1 . 12/10/2011
Aw He loves him!
R&R if you will - s/4608424/1/Koibito
| xEmeraldStarx chapter 1 . 7/8/2011
LOVE IT! You're a good writer!
| Dr. Emilit chapter 1 . 6/14/2011
Awwwwwwwwww! That was so cute. And fluffy :D
Good job, Envy ;)
| thedarknugget chapter 1 . 5/31/2011
Wow, this was actually better than what i thought it would be. I readd the summary and I thought i'd just check out your fanfic but this is really good. There is a litle fluffiness, but I think it'll get good. Well, please update soon!
| Emerald Ryuu Feather chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
threr should have been more action but its a good story none the less...
| SeaSaltFlavored chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
Recently became a fan of the show/manga.
3rd story I have read so far3
I have to say, It was utterly amazing! I am usually very picky on stories too ;)
I'll give you props, These characters are hard to pull off
You did a pretty good job on them though3 But I will admit, Sebastian was KIND of a OOC in this... Just towards the end
I was like, "Oh shit, she's slipping! SHE'S SLIPPING! Oh no wait... Ending was pretty good C: "
I am glad that your grammar was excellent as well
Overall, The story kicked ass! LOLOLOL, This is going in my faves3333
| Friendly Neighborhood Stalker chapter 1 . 5/26/2011
OMG I LOVED IT -
| FioraLee Yue chapter 1 . 5/23/2011
This particular fic feels a lot lighter than most of the Kuroshitsuji fics that have lots of twisted twists, dark themes, and complicated interactions that Sebastian and Ciel usually face.
It's really nice though, to put it simple. Although I must say that it rather felt...dragged? With all of the talk Sebastian uttered, I mean. There wasn't enough descriptions or subtle interactions between the two that may compliment this fluffy story of yours. Well, that's just my personal opinion .
Nevertheless, I'm still very much enjoying this. Seeing Sebastian say 'I love you' to Ciel is a pleasant dream that every SebaCiel fangirl wanted it to be canon.
| Sinattea chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
You wanted feedback... Here it is:
I really liked the way you managed these two lovers. It was great. I enjoyed reading.
Write something else, would be nice. And keep loving yaoi, I love it too.
By the way, loved your profile... Yei !
Atte: Sinattea (Mexican girl who does not believe in stereotypes either).
| LovelyWickedDescet chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
It was a very cute fluff story. Sweet and interesting, and not too short to where lenght complaints can fall in. Meaning, it was okay.
I didn't see any grammar mistakes (of course I am a bit sick (curse allergies) so I might have over-looked one.), nor did I see any spelling mistakes. Your descriptive details were good, giving a clear picture of what was happening, but I thought that it lacked, a tad (not much), with the dialogue.
Dialogue was alright, except one line from Sebastian. That one line made him sound a bit OOC, especially seeing as he does not use it towards his young master. The line I am talking about is "Yes, sir".
Bocchan, which he uses, is 'young master' or 'my lord'. Not sir.
Other than that though, they seemed pretty much IC. Just that line made Sebastian on the OOC-side.
Besides thoughs, I thought it was pretty well written. A few tips though.
When Sebastian stopped talking after "So, of course, I made the contract.". It was a tad bit confussing when he then started talking on another paragraph. Why? Well because you didn't finish the first talk with these ". So it had me wondering.. Did he pause there? Did he take a breath or something?
You have to be careful of that.. it is also a place where the details lake a tad.
Another tip is a very simple thing, that is just for readers not to get a bit annoyed (or confussed). Separating your a/ns from the chapter itself.
You see, when a story ends and an a/n starts (without a thing to separate it), you'd almost think the story is continuing. This can be a bit confussing or annoying to some. So separating the a/ns from the chapter helps to prevent that. And it is very simple to do.
But other than that.. this was really good. I'm curious to see what other fluff you'll provide us.
(Btw: Did you get to read chapters 56 and 57 yet? They were so good.. Especially chapter 56 with the sexy shot of Sebastian.)
| cookies111 chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
Ooooh, that was so sweet. Realy good for a first fanfic
| Euphoracle chapter 1 . 5/21/2011
I like it! Very sweet story! :) Thx!
| promocat chapter 1 . 5/20/2011
great!i love how sebastian's feelings change over time-write more ceil/sebastian fics