Reviews for My fool in a top gun uniform
zenka101 chapter 1 . 6/5
An interesting twist to Top Gun, but honestly a little exhausting to read with characters jumping back and forth. You really need to stay alert to know exactly what's going on within the story and which character is saying what. Perhaps an intro would've been nice and less jumping back and forth between characters, with a little bit more story telling in between to set the scene.
FieryRedSunrise chapter 2 . 6/25/2015
I think this is a good start but there are a few technicalities that I feel like I should point out. First is women were not allowed to be fighter pilots until 1993 and the movie is set in 1986 (you could always change the time the movie was set in to make it work but it's your choice) Second I'm pretty sure family members would not be allowed to serve in the same unit.
Also they were Naval Aviators. They were not in the Air Force so they would not be attending the Air Force Ball.
Sorry if this seems like nitpicking to you I'm just trying to help.
DarkFlameJ chapter 2 . 5/29/2015
This is awesome, I hope you haven't given up on this story, please update! :)
DarkFlameJ chapter 1 . 5/29/2015
This is hilarious, I love it how the security guards half wave back at her, and how he knew that she stuck her hung out at the person. Love this story please update more! :)
CohanLove0106 chapter 2 . 7/24/2014
Please update again soon!
Montanasmith5897 chapter 2 . 11/13/2013
Please update soon
Hop3lessR0mant1c chapter 2 . 5/5/2013
I really like it so far. Please update soon!
Guest chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
Good start. Please continue.
LdM
Lazarus.357 chapter 2 . 2/21/2012
Long sigh. A few places where the spelling and grammar checker would have been a good thing.

Hm...when did Lieutenant Keith Mitchell become Adam? - or is this an entirely different Maverick?

and - Abigail - is she a pilot or RIO? I'm having some trouble quite figuring that out.

The Navy-like all the services, get's real strange about family members in the same unit...I mean the Army is so bad about it, that my son had his orders to Korea delayed until I returned - and that's in Peacetime. Just thought I'd mention that.

DNIF for getting picked up on a speeding ticket? Snort - now, DUI, they'd be probably processing her for discharge. But a speeding ticket - hardly worth mentioning.
McCarthy chapter 2 . 1/20/2012
Isn't our dearest maverick's name Peter?

No offense, of course. Bloody good story!
Jpurple chapter 2 . 12/28/2011
Ch.2 was as great as ch.1! Keep up the good story :D
Jpurple chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
Ok well i just wanna say this is the first time I fell in love with a story on the first chapter! Well I love Abby already she reminds me of my friend :D ok well I'm gonna read ch.2 XD
xXx AJO xXx chapter 2 . 9/7/2011
I like it that it was long it was really good keep up the good work.
brittany chapter 2 . 8/28/2011
I love it! Please update soon!
TraceMK chapter 2 . 6/4/2011
I have to agree with my good friend on this, the sudden switch to the movie doesn't sit well with your first chapter, which I enjoyed immensely by the way. I'd caution you against using too much content from other stories on here ie the reference to the 6 future husbands, that's Ashley's thing lol, and there's background leading up to that. I should know, I've helped work up these characters for a long time, you can credit me with Pete becoming Adam. You have a good writing style and sense of humour, have faith that you can create the personality of the character of Abby as an individual and take this story on a path all of your own. Looking forward to the next installment. TraceMK
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