|Reviews for My fool in a top gun uniform|
| Montanasmith5897 chapter 2 . 11/13/2013
Please update soon
| Hop3lessR0mant1c chapter 2 . 5/5/2013
I really like it so far. Please update soon!
| Guest chapter 2 . 9/7/2012
Good start. Please continue.
| Lazarus.357 chapter 2 . 2/21/2012
Long sigh. A few places where the spelling and grammar checker would have been a good thing.
Hm...when did Lieutenant Keith Mitchell become Adam? - or is this an entirely different Maverick?
and - Abigail - is she a pilot or RIO? I'm having some trouble quite figuring that out.
The Navy-like all the services, get's real strange about family members in the same unit...I mean the Army is so bad about it, that my son had his orders to Korea delayed until I returned - and that's in Peacetime. Just thought I'd mention that.
DNIF for getting picked up on a speeding ticket? Snort - now, DUI, they'd be probably processing her for discharge. But a speeding ticket - hardly worth mentioning.
| McCarthy chapter 2 . 1/20/2012
Isn't our dearest maverick's name Peter?
No offense, of course. Bloody good story!
| Jpurple chapter 2 . 12/28/2011
Ch.2 was as great as ch.1! Keep up the good story :D
| Jpurple chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
Ok well i just wanna say this is the first time I fell in love with a story on the first chapter! Well I love Abby already she reminds me of my friend :D ok well I'm gonna read ch.2 XD
| xXx AJO xXx chapter 2 . 9/7/2011
I like it that it was long it was really good keep up the good work.
| brittany chapter 2 . 8/28/2011
I love it! Please update soon!
| TraceMK chapter 2 . 6/4/2011
I have to agree with my good friend on this, the sudden switch to the movie doesn't sit well with your first chapter, which I enjoyed immensely by the way. I'd caution you against using too much content from other stories on here ie the reference to the 6 future husbands, that's Ashley's thing lol, and there's background leading up to that. I should know, I've helped work up these characters for a long time, you can credit me with Pete becoming Adam. You have a good writing style and sense of humour, have faith that you can create the personality of the character of Abby as an individual and take this story on a path all of your own. Looking forward to the next installment. TraceMK
| cp6 chapter 2 . 5/31/2011
i like it, keep going :)
| alaarakkoptusnet.com.au chapter 2 . 5/30/2011
You've got a really good strong start in Chapter One but bringing the movie in, line for line in chapter two kinds of spoils it. It's missing something big time. Perhaps it's orignality. I'm not sure but I think maybe you should scrap following the movie so closely and perhaps send them on their own adventure. Besides the way things come over in chapter one I would have thought Maverick and Ab's were partners. Goose is okay but I've never really liked his character hence why I invented Lee but that's me. I know you've already written and posted this so maybe it could be a dream or something showing the start of Maverick and Abby's friendship? Have a think about it but I'd be inclined to scrap the movie word for word. I've watched it way to many times to be able to read it.
| alaarakkoptusnet.com.au chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
I LIKE IT! I'm going to send the link to a friend of mine who has actually helped me build my characters for the last twenty years. What a great laugh and the worst thing is I can see it happening. Might have to do some private messaging along the line too as there are a few things I need to explain but other than that it's great! A really good laugh. I'm impressed :)