Reviews for Mass Effect: A New History
Skepsis Forever chapter 7 . 7/5
So... who's funding the Krogan Rebellion: Part 2? Saren or Tevos? Is Tevos indoctrinated? That's going to bite the Reapers in the behind HARD if humanity turns the Krogan around towards the Alliance. Might bite everyone else in the behind too while they're at it, that's the Krogan's middle name after all.
And the Batarians probably won't get indoctrinated and the Alliance will find out about the Reapers (though it's a stretch, but I'm hopeful). Wonder what happens when the Alliance realises that the Citadel is THE relay towards deep space and a million dreadnaughts. At this point, all-out war is inevitable. Maybe the Salarian Councilor is going to turn the Salarians towards the Alliance, because otherwise I see no hope for the Asari and Turians, Asari because of Tevos' actions and Turians because they're stubborn like that and also disastrous first contact.
dghornick chapter 7 . 6/29
fantastic story , just found this and read through it in a day... well night technically (note to self find good fanfictions while its still daylight so i don't read to 5 AM ) not sure if you will ever come back to this seeing as you have disappeared for a few years . I hope you will come back but i doubt you will. And if your not writing because you became a book writer would you mind PM ing me the titles so i could read them ? you have a gift that i envy i i would really like to appreciate all of you works . I also Hope you didn't drop off the edge of the world because you died , leavening something as good as this unfinished would be beyond tragic , the lose of you talent more so ... dear god , im having one of my morbid days.
Difdi chapter 2 . 6/4
About your author note at the start of the chapter:

It isn't a plot hole. You're assuming the Reapers have just one plan, but they don't.

The standard Reaper invasion uses a lone scout to watch civilization develop, then the scout sends the signal to the Citadel to open the special relay it has to where the Reaper fleet is, and then everybody gets reaped. In the current cycle, that scout is Nazara/Sovereign. The special relays are used for the same reason they use Stargates in Stargate: SG-1 - because it's too far to walk.

But in the last cycle, the Protheans figured out the standard plan, at least part of it, and sabotaged the signal receiver on the Citadel. That's what Nazara was doing in the first game, repairing the system so it could send the signal. But Nazara got taken out before it could do so.

The second game is a contingency plan. If the lone scout fails, it's quicker to build a new one than it is for one to fly in from the void between galaxies. The Collectors are programmed to use the most worthy species for the new Reaper, and who is more worthy than the species responsible for foiling the main plan?

But if one almost foolproof plan has already failed, why use just one contingency plan? What if it fails? Instead, throw in several. So while the Collectors are building the Human Reaper, the Alpha relay plan is also in play. There may well have been half a dozen or more contingency plans in play, and we only saw two in the game because the Protheans had figured out the others and killed them 50,000 years ago. And all the contingencies failed.

But there are no walls in space, and even with all their shortcuts disabled, the Reapers can still simply fly into the galaxy, which they did in the third game.
hughfj08 chapter 7 . 8/17/2014
An enjoyable read.
A few minor grammatical errors, but so few and far between as to have no bearing on my enjoyment.
Though I am a little disappointed that the fic has been left to die :/
thepkrmgc chapter 4 . 7/14/2014
yay for politics, they are a bit convoluted and hard to understand though
thepkrmgc chapter 3 . 7/14/2014
even the reticulans are preferable to the reapers, heres hoping they come to their senses
thepkrmgc chapter 2 . 7/14/2014
yay for councilor Hillardan! he seems to be the only concilor with his head screwed on straight
thepkrmgc chapter 1 . 7/14/2014
go nihlus, and i suspect that cerberus is funded by the council
cellester chapter 7 . 6/16/2014
isn't vox the mashal and mintara the omega agent? the seem to have been switch in this chapter.
EffervescentNova chapter 6 . 3/14/2014
Odd that Sovereign tols Saren that the Collectors (his own agents) were the greater threat.

The Krogan, if unleashed, could force the Alliance's ground forces off world. But the Alliance could still annihilate the Krogan literally wiping them off the face of Tuchanka, either with devestating weaponry or with bio/nano weapons.

How can a species be at war with its own genders. That's complete nonsense.
EffervescentNova chapter 5 . 3/14/2014
Where did a supposedly limited in profession Drow male learn combat skills? Why was he like a balerina? What makes you think that you can punch a charging Krogan in the fae without shattering your hand?

Allowing a scientist like the Vegan to travel through to Ilium is like the USA allowing an American scientist to 'tour' the Ukraine during the cold war. Not believable.
EffervescentNova chapter 4 . 3/14/2014
If the Drow have gender dimorphism and the females operate their industry and military; then shouldn't drown females be more 'masculine' and males more 'feminine' otherwise it makes no sense in their biology. Cultural positions aren't just random. There is a reason that militaries are all male and that any female presence is mostly limited to support roles. The same goes with industry, there were no women in industry until the advent pneumatic or electronic labor saving devices, which reduced the manual strain of such work.

Your aliens aren't very alien.
EffervescentNova chapter 3 . 3/14/2014
An Asari Spectre on Earth. Who could've missed that? There aren't exactly many of them.
EffervescentNova chapter 2 . 3/14/2014
Well, an entire chapter without a single Human in it! You've officially killed the Mass Effect in your Mass Effect story. Well done!

Would a bipedal creature have paws? Why would batarians make up half of Elysium even though they're not part of the Alliance? Wouldn't the Alliance population be at least 5 times that of the Batarian?

How could a Batarian admiral school an Alliance one on his own technology? Doesn't make sense.

With a morass of aliens making up the Alliance. most of your story is about law and politic and therefore quite awkward and even boring in parts. The fact there are virtually no Humans in your story anymore removes any sense of the original Mass Effect games and generally makes your story less interesting.

Elysium is a Human naming convention, odd for a supposedly 95% alien colony in a 85% alien Alliance. I'll finish this story because I've come so far, but it really is just a great big mess.
EffervescentNova chapter 1 . 3/13/2014
Cerberus was never a terrorist/supremacist group. It was always determined to do whatever it took to advance Humanity and did not balk at hideous and dangerous experiments; but a terrorist group it was not. It is also not believable, since it's been well over a hundred years since the Vegans were integrated into the Alliance and 50 years since the war with the Hierarchy.
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