Poppy only checked one for magical exhaustion? Bullshit . . .

A great story I really hope this isn't abandoned as you've written a brilliant story with great oc's and a wonderful lore made to make the story better. Please continue this your a great write and I it's a brilliant story.

i think if this may evee continue, it wiil definitely going to have best harem story ever. I love your OCs. And I love Sheila...

just finished reading this story, never get of reading it. I hope at some point you continue with this story it's absolutely brilliant! Please consider updating and continuing it it's one of the best harry potter stories I've ever read and I've read a lot of them! Please update!

I know this story is old and the author likely won't read recent reviews but I just had to give the author the metaphorical slap behind the head after reading this chapter.

The part where Harry used a Telekinesis of all things to keep the Acromantulas at bay and being completely on the defensive was just mindbogglingly stupid and uncharacteristic of a student of Merlin. In prior chapters before this one, the readers get a sense that Harry had power and skill in spade to handle the Acromantulas with ease, if anything completely destroy the herd.

If you're thinking of bringing the argument that Harry was too focused on defending Daniel to go on the offensive, you can forget that right now. All Harry had to do was stun both Daniel and Weasel, then transfigure both of them into tiny marbles and put them in his pocket before other going on the offensive or escaping the Forest.

This was just...inexcusable. It speaks of someone who has no skills, tactics or power which is a contradiction to the early chapters where he displays abilities and raw power not seen in thousands of years.

To emphasis how stupid this was I'm going to take a quote out of this chapter:

-"Harry grunted in pain as vein of muscle sketched to both of his hands. Sweat started to pour out of him. It was too much for him to handle, there were too many. He couldn't retain his Telekinesis for much longer. He dropped to one knee, breathing heavily, and glanced gallingly at his brother over his shoulder.

"Don't just stand there, do something!" -

1. He relied on a second year who doesn't have any offensive spells in his arsenal to deal with the Acromantulas while pointlessly defending with a barrier.
2. He didn't use his brain and decided to use a defensive barrier that would only delay their imminent deaths after Harry reaches magical exhaustion.
3. He decided to ignore Callista and interrupt her revelation about the Chamber monster even though that vital piece of information could have been useful in defending the girls against the monster as Harry swore to do. Even if he didn't want the girls involved and getting themselves into trouble, just knowing who the monster was can be a means of self-defense which is why Harry was especially stupid.
4. He spends his time playing that stupid game Quidditch and barely any time training himself in magic to be even stronger which is the only way to explain his stupid decision to go with a Telekinesis defensive barrier of {all things} rather than being smart with his choice of spells. I honestly wouldn't be surprised if his magic atrophied due to lack of training and focusing all his time on Quidditch.

The main reason why I think Harry should have been smarter is because of the way he grew up, loveless and raising himself to survive. He would have needed to have mature adult thoughts and be smart in order to raise himself without parents attending to him. This intelligence should have made him incredibly smart but in almost every chapter, we see instances of Harry displaying bouts of stupidity on a Ronald Weasley level which detracts from your story.

As someone who can sense magical presences in the castle, he had more than enough information to make deductive logical conclusions about the identity of Quirrell, the identity of the monster petrifying kids, how to effectively fight a Acromantulas herd without resorting to resorting to purely defensive, magically draining spell like an autistic retard.

Seriously, there are a thousand ways he could have handled the Acromantulas. Transfigure his brother and weasel into marble balls, insert into pocket, cast a wide-area light spell similar to the Lumos Solem that acts like a flashbang thereby momentary blinding them before casting a wide-area Jelly-Legs Jinx on every spider. The spiders have 8 legs and rely heavily on them for scurrying away and offensive measures. Without their legs, they are as good as dead, unable to scuttle up a tree or spin a web around their prey. Then Harry could have finished them off with transfiguring hundreds of tree branches into maces and banishing them at neck-breaking speeds at the spiders, mauling them to death as they remain helpless under the effects of the Jelly-Legs Jinx.

To deal with Aragog, Harry could have vanished every bone in that giant spider's body similar to the way Lockhart vanished the bones in Daniel's arm, cast a quick sand underneath the body and burn it with a small controlled Fiendyre.

What Harry did in this chapter was approaching autistic levels of stupidity. But I do like your story and how you make these characters come to life with personality and teenage angst and drama. I am just not a fan of powerful Harry Potter who doesn't hone his magical skills but slacks off playing Quidditch and being a punching bag for 4 hormonal teenaged girls. I am seriously of the belief that Harry's magic atrophied and his monumentally lapse of judgement in this chapter can be attributed to lack of focusing on magical training.

Why did I start this with out checking the last updated date :(

Dark hair and green eyes...
Mordred?

Morgana?

True King of Serpents...
Is Harry thinking of Dragons?
Will Kilgharrah be making an appearance?
Or perhaps Aithusa?

Lily is going to freak.

Gandalf?

Is this a crossover with the Merlin TV series?

Come back, this story is too good to leave hanging.

this is onw of tHE BEST HP FANFIC I HAVE EVER READ BASED ON THIS KIND OF PLOT
THANK YOU FOR WRIRING THIS AND I HOPE YOULL UPDATE SOON

Why have Harry be clueless that girls like him? Why do authors do that?
This isn't a dig at you, at least not specifically - it seems 90% of authors do the same thing so it's more of a dig at writers in general for doing something I don't like.
Anyways, what's the purpose? He's 14, these days that's the age that people start losing their virginity at . . . I could see it if he was still 11, girls are starting puberty and the guys aren't there yet, so the girls are getting into guys while the guys are clueless. But c'mon, still at 14? I hope that changes soon . . . Some books have them still clueless at 17 or older and that's just absurd and a half.
Oh, and the unspoken agreement between every female everywhere of all ages to not inform the MC that girls like him, that's a weird commonality I don't understand either. I can see not caring, ignoring, but not understanding? o,O
Honest question, what does said cluelessness bring to the story? Or what is it meant to?