Reviews for Lord Over the Night Sky
galbatorix123 chapter 4 . 4/18
Hi, first nice story.
Then some small things with the german translation. "[Tragen Sie neuen Namen ein.]" it is not completely wrong ("Tragen sie einen neuen Namen ein"), but even better is "Neuen Namen eintragen" (it's more smooth in this case).
Then there is [Name hat angenommen, ruft bitte mich Reinforce ab jetzt.] in the first part (before the comma) is the order of the words wrong. The correct order is [Hat Namen angenommen, ...] or without auxiliary [Name angenommen, ...]/[Name akzeptiert, ...] .
To the second pard of the sentence. To the word order [..., ruft bitte mich Reinforce ab jetzt.] is wrong, correct is [..., ruft mich bitte Reinforce ab jetzt] or [..., bitte ruft mich Reinforce ab jetzt.].
More smooth is [..., bitte ruft mich ab jetzt Reinforce.]
Then ther is the issue to who the device responds. With [..., bitte ruft mich Reinforce ab jetzt.] the device speak to all people in the room (meaning plural). But the device responds to the master (to Harry (singular)) so not [... ruft ...] but without the 't' [... ruf ...].
Then the verb itself. Yes ther is something like 'Rufname' (firstname or callname) and [ruf] is not wrong, but it is not really used in this context anymore. Better is the verb [nennen].
So the complete, correct and up to date response to Harry is something like [Name akzeptiert, bitte nenn mich ab jetzt Reinforce.] (or when it adresses all people in the room and not only Harry 'Name akzeptiert, bitte nennt mich ab jetzt Reinforce.').
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 32 . 3/20
well, its obvious you wanna power up more HP characters...
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 9 . 3/20
great, stuck with Hermione again...
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 7 . 3/20
umm, Reinforces hair is Silver and so why did Harry have Blonde hair when using Unison? it should have gone Silver

not to bad i guess... though everything is moving very fast, i guess you just rushing to get Hogwarts maybe?
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 5 . 3/20
bahaha, Harry, Nanoha, Fate and Hayate will trash all of Hogwarts with ease...
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 2 . 3/19
huh, Vita and the other knights have no reason to get dressed up as she isn't there master (unless Harry gets them to do it)

poor Hayate don't have her own dress up dolls
eliteshadow chapter 1 . 9/2/2014
nice chapter please update soon!
Cemalidor chapter 1 . 8/7/2014
Yup, to few pieces i saw of Nanoha i also wondered why the devices were talking german. :) Guess they thought it would be cool/funny.
TehShadowKitten chapter 113 . 4/29/2014
damn this was a great story, well written and worded and a great plot.
Rimshooter chapter 6 . 4/26/2014
Eh, small issue. Aside from Hayate not knowing about the theft, she's nine years old. She wouldn't have been out of diapers at the time the theft took place (eight years ago). It's completely impossible for her to have been responsible. But this is largely irrelevant and doesn't really need to be said. It's just more concrete than 'we'll take your word for it.'
Kithrin chapter 113 . 3/9/2014
technically there are only 2 of the same person, Zwei is at MOST a clone of the original reinforce, a modified one at that.
zanthian123 chapter 48 . 2/13/2014
final fantasy VII Zack Fair
Fast Frank chapter 69 . 1/21/2014
It seems from the sense of his reasoning, that Albus has concluded that Harry is Tom's new vessel, not vassel.
Fast Frank chapter 68 . 1/21/2014
What happened to the Horcrux that was in canon, Nagini?
Fast Frank chapter 24 . 1/21/2014
Piqued, darn it!
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