Kitty Jinxter chapter 1 . 6/25/2013
I love this. It's so accurate to the fanfiction out, especially in this fandom.
Also it was hilarious and in still laughing haha
TheVendingMachine chapter 1 . 5/20/2012
XD ohmyfuckinggod. You made me lol. xD And I'm not just typing that with a straigiht face. I'm actually cracking up. This was so refreshing and so fucking hilarious.
Jokul Frosti chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
wow, that was a fail, but still so fucking hilarious!
sea-salt kisses chapter 1 . 7/30/2011
I may be wrong, but to me, it doesn't really feel like you're bashing Xion — this more comes off as bashing the writers of AkuRoku yaoi or just yaoi in general. May just be me. I understand where you're coming from, and while I don't agree with you, I appreciated your story because it was bold and refreshing. Though, if you were trying to bash Xion, I would caricature Axel and Roxas less and Xion more. But I liked this a lot. It encompasses a lot of AkuRoku stuff I've read. xD is a diehard Axel/Roxas fan Keep up the good work.
blueloving-vampire chapter 1 . 6/19/2011
This made my soul giggle. :)

It was good for such a short little story, but I felt the need to point out something.

Since you havent played the game, you wouldnt know that Xion isnt Kairi.


Shes actually closest to being Sora. Especially considering at the end of 358/2 days, she sort of, kind of turned into Sora, so then Roxas killed her. :D and then promptly forgot everything -,- Because, of course, the game HAS to be some huge mind-fuck.


Anyway, I recommend you play the games. :) Theyre good!
PiNKCooKieS chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
...i love you XD
Rick chapter 1 . 6/11/2011
Good job. You know you're trolling correctly when someone flames you.
Amaya Loves Joo chapter 1 . 6/10/2011

Aster my friend showed me this, I was so happy that someone else hates Xion as much as me!

She is a Mary-Sue filler character that has zero purpose in the games!

AkuRoku FTW~

Thank you for posting this, made my day xD
Anonymous Author chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
"A Mary Sue is a character is so brilliant, witty, amazing, attractive and wonderful that one (or all) of the main canon characters completely falls head over heels for. Basically, this character tends to be a thinly disguised wannabe of the author themselves."

Examples for how "Xion" in your "Story" isn't really a Mary Sue:

"She was as ugly as hell, had a very bad temper, was extremely violent and had no boobs."

In the first paragraph, Mary Sues are defined to be "perfect in everyway", have no flaws, very sweet and kind to everyone. Usually, they are described with massive boobs.


Mary Sues are written to be very intelligent/brilliant, and can never be wrong.

The reason why Xion is even in Kingdom Hearts is because she helps the plot. No Xion, No Plot. Just like with Kairi. No Kairi, No Plot. And Namine. No Namine, No Plot.

Basically, they help the plot, so they are very important. These characters are called "Plot Helpers" NOT "Mary Sues".

On that note, I'm wondering why I even read this... thing thoroughly, with all the incorrect spelling, terrible grammar, and impossible statements such as: “But Axel was so awesome and so fucking hot that he managed to push her off the tower.”

In just that one sentence you made Axel seem like a Gary Stu (the male term for Mary Sue). You sound like a preteen with all the curse words your flinging everywhere in the story. And maybe you're just a poser who has friends, who are extremely sexist to their own sex, and hate Kairi/Xion/Namine, and decided to follow along and “be like everyone else.”

And yes, this was a failed attempt at yaoi.
Spades chapter 1 . 6/5/2011
Oh. My. Gawd.

This is beautiful. Just beautiful. ;-;

Xion is a total Mary-Sue, and I'm glad someone else feels the same way.

I love you for this.
yamade chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
this just made my day.
UnleashedYoaiFan chapter 1 . 5/31/2011
Personally I Love this, I mean whose not up for bashing Xion?*THUNBS UP!* GREAT JOB!
For science chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
Not bad for a first story. I can't stand Xion either. Irritating as hell. From my experience however, Mary sues are perfect and I venture to say Xion is NOT. Considering she has a wonky face and Bad haircut and all. Needless to say I dont think she's Mary sue, she's just a filler character. On another note the rating could probably go down to "T" since there isnt any hardcore porn or anything. Umm... What else... Oh! The fic was actually quite funny. Then again I'm always up for some good ol' Xion bashing. Nice one. Keep writing!
Angel101 chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
I seriously don't think xion's a Mary sue...because...typically Mary sue's dont die