|Reviews for First Try|
| kyra chapter 13 . 2/23
this story is good. you should write a sequal :)
| Makokam chapter 13 . 2/5
Well. This was an interesting little story.
I'm not really surprised that Mizuki needed to betray a village to get rewarded by another village with Jounin rank, seeing as Naruto kicked his ass in the very beginning of the series. Perhaps the other village would hope his lame ass would get killed on his first A or S rank mission.
Anyway, this is an interesting story, I like they way you did it for the most part. My only complaint would be that there was very little development of Naruto's original teammates so I didn't really feel much when they almost died, became Chuunin, or when Naruto was poached away. ...though, there was very little to be poached from.
Might have been interesting to have given Sasuke and Sakura to Tetsuo instead of giving Naruto to Kakashi.
Thanks for the fun read.
| Makokam chapter 8 . 2/4
"The Kyuubi. They kept the fucking Kyuubi."
One of the best "oh crap" moments I've read. Well played.
| Makokam chapter 5 . 2/4
I just want to take a moment and say that I really liked seeing Kakashi concerned for Naruto even before he was his student. It was a really refreshing change from all the fics I've read where people bash the crap out of him.
| WRoosterdf chapter 13 . 1/12
The story was okay, if very short. I must say, after coming here from Tvtropes I expected something different. There are some irregularities of what was supposed to happen in this story and what is said to happen on tvtropes.
| The Reading Elf chapter 13 . 1/8
Loved this story!
| leafpool5 chapter 13 . 12/15/2013
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/5/2013
Why did you change one of the besr scenes just sync it up with a canon that fell off the wagon ages ago?! Please could you post the original drafts under as one shots or something?
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/5/2013
I didn't like you icluding those eps of shippudden. It was better before
| Inuyashagirl7692 chapter 6 . 11/24/2013
Ha! That's what you get Obi- I mean, Tobi. Honestly, does anyone not know, anymore?
| Inuyashagirl7692 chapter 3 . 11/24/2013
My only regret about this AU is that Iruka never got the chance to be as close to Naruto as he is in canon.
| Inuyashagirl7692 chapter 2 . 11/22/2013
I can't wait for Tetsuo to stop calling Naruto "the Demon child"
| Haitorei chapter 1 . 11/21/2013
I really like the story concept. It's nice and quite original! (at least I haven't seen it yet.)
| SpiralAK chapter 13 . 11/20/2013
The thing I like most about this story (and other stories in this series) is the world-building. You use canon plot-holes and fill them with new ideas and sound explanations. While your style of writing does take some getting used to (it's more description-based than dialogue-based), but you do a good enough job of giving us (the readers) a good insight into the thought process of established characters and how Naruto graduating two years early (a good thing for him, by the way) has impacted not only his life, but the lives of Sasuke, Sakura and his former classmates, as well as people like Konohamaru. I also like how you switch to minor characters (Hibachi) or characters unrelated to this fic's general plot (Tobi) and make their presence in the fic meaningful and significant.
What I don't like is that Naruto's teammates, Suzume and Satoshi, aren't really focused on in this fic, despite being important to Naruto, who holds them in such high regard. Same goes for that other Hidden Leaf team in the Mist Chunin Exam. Besides that, this is quite good, a great fanfiction.
| Vandenberg chapter 13 . 11/20/2013
You are a brilliant writer and SDFGHJKL there are no words to describe how stoked I was with the characterisations in First Try, canon and original alike. Off the top of my head, my favorite character would have to be Tetsuo, closely followed by Naruto himself and Kinako (i'm cry). The kiri chuunin exam arc was great too, especially with the sheer volume of thought you put into it! And aww comparatively happy!Haku is now a thing. And uuugghgh Kakashi is such a bagel with his student-snatching shenanigans, but I'll see how it pans out before launching into any tirades. " On the whole, thanks for being awesome. :)