|Reviews for Harry Potter: Duke of Gryffindor|
| DragonTamer01 chapter 2 . 2/24
Oh yeah! Things are getting good now!
| Filodea chapter 3 . 2/6
It seems as if you have a good beginning for this story, but I am going to have to stop reading. Your constant switches between past tense and present tense makes the story too hard to follow. You refer to Lily and James in the present tense, when past tense would be correct. You refer to female characters as him or he. It keeps throwing me out of the flow of the story. If you can find a good beta who will go through all your chapters and fix the mistakes, do it. It will help your story to be readable.
| Lionasha No Bruja chapter 1 . 2/3
Nope, sorry. Seems interesting, but your punctuation is TERRIBLE. Your lack of correct quotations and dialogue structure in the first chapter don't leave a good first impression about your story.
Get a beta.
| Tree JS chapter 6 . 1/26
Did you get the partoni for of Al from the Pokémon called ninetails?
| staretoile chapter 25 . 1/5
I so enjoyed reading your story. I especially loved Al. With all his different facattes and all he
accomplished in his life (if good or bad). I mean he is only around 30 years old in your story after
all. I had to cry when he died. Poor Irina. I really hope Harry and HErmione get Dumbles back
for that. I love their soul-bond.
I am looking forward to reading your sequel!
| DylanL chapter 25 . 11/19/2013
Great story. I do have a question though concerning the knife dumbles used, based on how the curse works would severing the hilt from the blade have rendered it ineffective? I know its an odd question but i want to know. Also did irina become harry's personal guard or did hec become his personal guard when he took over as commander
| RereMcFluffles chapter 1 . 10/20/2013
General lack of punctuation when it is needed leaves this story extremely hard to work through.
| JWR Cromwell chapter 5 . 10/14/2013
| Susan M. M chapter 3 . 10/7/2013
Laying it on with a butter knife when it comes to Clan Weasley, aren't you? However, I liked the soul-bond kiss destroying several Horcruxes and maiming Voldemort.
| Susan M. M chapter 2 . 10/7/2013
You have a lot of very long sentences. You might want to vary your sentence structure by breaking some of your run-on sentences into two or three shorter sentences.
| Susan M. M chapter 1 . 10/7/2013
The tense changes are a little jarring.
| Guest chapter 17 . 10/5/2013
Thanks for plug on hellfire missiles.
| Filmsmith chapter 26 . 10/2/2013
I really enjoyed your story. I especially like how you balanced out the power of magic with the power of a black powder. The only part that discouraged me was how you build up the soul bond, but not really apply it anywhere. Keep up the great H/Hr fanfiction!
| Millie chapter 1 . 9/5/2013
It is a shame that a story so interesting, is written with such poor grammar.
Have a friend spell check it and re-post it?
Please. I really want to read this!
| killer4853 chapter 25 . 8/26/2013
love the story