Gave up reading, don’t like Daphne’s attitude towards Hermione.

I’m wondering how Hermiones life is, without Harry as a friend

"you will face his daddies wrath" would have sounded better

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Ah learning about Sirius from people in the afterlife is exceptionally lame, as is solving the horcrux with some potion.

The scene with basilisk in canon is great because Harry is basically alone, 'he sends his champion a hat and a bird' or whatever Voldemort says. And Harry STILL wins. In this it's 5 grown ass men losing to a very talented teenager, and Harry again has his own role diluted.

I guess I see the vision with giving him adults that protect him and resulting in him having to do less bullshit alone, but he never should've been involved in the first place and they just brought him right in there. And with the forbidden forest shit in first year they still just threw him right in there?

The shade or whatever being invulnerable is silly but the horcuxes being indestructible is silly in and of itself, since horcuxes aren't actually indestructible but Voldemort made them that way after with magic, I'm pretty sure. How the fuck do you even do that? And if it's possible to make a living entity like that why do they not make more things like that? Like the stone soldiers in book seven that protect the school, why are they not indestructible? It is just another Rowlingism that is so illogical.

No comment or consequences for the people who sent them out there, literally almost dying due to a categorized 5X creature. Love Harry Potter and it's blatant illogical bullshit

Of course, Daphne-Sue finishes top of the year. Why do people always make Daphne a Mary-Sue when she is included in a story? Here hoping she becomes less of one in the future chapters, because I am enjoying the story besides that.

I get modifying the trials so that everyone gets a chance to shine, but you made Harry completely useless in the process.

Great story. I love the variations you have put in that make it better than just another “Harry us Slytherin” story.

I can appreciate a "misguided but accountable" Dumbledore. That's how I handle him.

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This is a well written story and I appreciate that you are trying to write in language that fits with us Brits (e.g. you moved from sorcerer's stone to philosophers stone). You asked for someone to "brit pick" so i thouht i'd point out the americanisms in this chapter:

VacationAll of our breaks from school are called holidays e.g. summer holiday, christmas holiday, easter holiday.

SlacksI think you mean trousers? The range of trogers we have are suit trousers, trousers, chinos, jeans and Joggers. Reading around yout description, I think you'd be safe just refering to them as trousers?

ShirtDo you mean a t-shirt/top or an actual shirt with buttons and a collar? The word shirt by itself is only really used to refer to the latter.

DresserI think you mean chest of drawers?

Roast chicken and biscuits?This may just be me, but I've never come across this, I asked a few friends and they hadn't either. Maybe change biscuits for roast potatoes (and add a sneaky yorkshire pudding?)

Momshould be mum

cookiesyou mention cookies a few times. In the UK we call them biscuts unless they are acutal chocolate chip cookies. It doesn't change the plot and you may well have envisioned that they were making chocolate chip cookies.

There are other british SPaG changes I could point out, but these are minor and I know how demoralizing it can be to have someone nitpick. I'll only brit pick the other chapters if you ask me to.

Harry is learning that asking for helpcan be a good thing. After relying on himself for most of his life, he struggled with the idea that he could ask for help and potentially receive it. Thanks to his friends, new family, and Dumbledore, he is starting to realise that he does not have to do things alone. I only wish that he realised the same thing in the books/films. Thank you for helping Harryto evolve into that realisation.

I like the fact that you are changing Harry's future a bit from the books/films. As you said, Dumbledore did nothing to help Harry until the summer before sixth year, and even that was not a lot. He did not believe that Harry was being abused, and therefore harry's reluctance to return to the Dursley's. You have given Harry several good friends, who worried enough to alert Dumbledore to their concerns whe Harry did not reply to their letters. This pushed Dumbledore into an unannounced visit to the Dursley's to check up on Harry, and alerting him to the gravity of the situation he had foisted onto Harry for so long. Hopefully, the headmaster will be successful in his promised attempt to get justice for Harry by Muggle legal means. Could he also do so through Wizarding legal methods too? I hope so!

marvelous story. well written and well paced.