Interesting so far, can't wait for the next chapter!

VERY interesting. I've seen a handful of stories in the Harry Potter fandom where people write "what if's" but I've never read anything where Harry gets close to the Greengrass family. Please, keep writing. It's always great when someone has a story that's original and unique. Have to ask though, will Draco be making an appearance in this? Seeing as how he did marry Astoria, of course?

Anyways, if you have time, I'd love for you to check out some of the one-shots I've written on my profile. I've got only three so far, and they're M, but I'm working on more at the moment, as well. I'd love to hear your opinion! Thanks so much and, really, great job! -Vonne

It is a story I've seen before but one I will usually look into. I do hope that you don't go down the path that most writers do by going to the extreme with the cliches, especially with Ron, Hermione, and Dumbledore. I'm not saying make them the same as cannon but a little more then just Ron is super jealous, Hermione is super know-it-all and bossy, and Dumbledore is super manipulative. When I see that I stop reading. I do like the pairing and all the opportunities a writer has when developing an undeveloped character. The Greengrasses in your story seem nice but I would caution against making them too nice. They're a neutral family which would mean that they have a balance of both Light and Dark so that they can never be perceived as either. All in all, it's a good start and I look forward to more.