2 oopses
First, choosing an elective, during second year, means 3 not 2 years until OWLs. Unless you are changing to OWLs at the end of 4th year.
Second, in canon Harry did not hurt in the presence of Riddle's journal. Remember when he picked it up out of Myrtle's toilet? Also when he encountered that journal in the Chamber of Secrets? Also no pain. You are the author and can make any changes you want but...
John

Well written : look forward to additional chapters

I really hope Remus liked the Excitable Boy album because of Werewolves and not the actual song Excitable Boy 'cause that's a pretty creepy song.

You designed a wonderful change to canon

Your theory works. He wasn’t together enough to be killed

Brilliant

The dance scene was endearing

This is scary. Yes, I sympathize with Malfoy. He’s just a kid. I hope Narcissa rips Lucy to pieces

Best way to mess up the ferret

The more you build up Draco, the farther he will fall. Go for it

Hopefully he shares it with Remus or Daphne’s parents. They will know

Good that you show the characters as not always perfect or nice. They are middle schoolers. I look foward to Daphne ripping Susan’s face off

Deep but fulfilling

Is Cyrus also married to Tracey’s mom

Great conversation among the kids

Thank goodness.

Watching Harry and Hedwig starve was always painful

Much more exciting scenes than Covid

Much better story than canon

Whoever approved the detention needs the horsewhip