Reviews for Vision
zairre chapter 1 . 6/30/2013
beautiful :)
i like the lack of backstory. it makes them more intense
BlueCat69 chapter 1 . 3/19/2012
WOW! Your first attempt at both slash and vamp fic! I’m amazed, really. You have definitely earned your place among the elite of porn writers. This was SO well written and seriously wonderful. Thank you so much for sharing.
sillygoose20 chapter 1 . 2/21/2012
Hot hot hot! And very well written too.

You have a nice way with a sentence, the story is tight, the sex is hot. What more could I ask for? I really liked how you ramped up the tension before bringing in the blinding release. I'm partial to this version of Jasper—graceful and masculine, able to block Edward to E's extreme frustration, an equal. And Emmett, not as dumb as he looks. Ha ha. But ick to the Emmett/Jasper moment. But thumbs up to the writing. :-)
ChefJayla chapter 1 . 9/14/2011
i'm so glad you decided to share this. i wish there was more. thank you.
sweetandsaltyff chapter 1 . 8/31/2011
Wow! This was a fascinating story and so unique. At first I could feel this almost palpable melancholy in the tone, an undercurrent of the whole story. I liked that you gave us morsels of the background (their separation from the others) but didn't lay it all out for us. It provided an air of unsettling mystery that added to the sortof heavy feeling at first. Your style is wonderful-Edwards perspective was mesmerizing and almost hypnotic, and very otherworldly. I felt like he was very male and also otherworldly/vampirish if a perspective could convey such a thing. I loved him and felt him deeply, which says so much about the way you wrote him. I even felt that he and jaspers ultimate coupling was very otherworldly and it worked for them. Your descriptions were gorgeous, especially in Edwards experience of the bite and everything else. I could go on and on, I really, really loved this. Excellent job! Xo
DemeRain chapter 1 . 8/4/2011
Well written and intriguing. Its interesting to see how tortured Edward is by his ability to read minds. I think it would also be interesting to view this relationship from Jasper's perspective, dealing with both his and Edward's emotions. Thanks for sharing!
vampireisthenewblack chapter 1 . 6/29/2011
I know I'm in a minority, but I was entirely happy with the lack of backstory in this entry. You started in the middle of things, which I like, and not really knowing how they got there fit with Edwards feeling that he was a little insane. It totally worked for me and was one of my two favourite entries in the contest. Well done :)
Fr333bird chapter 1 . 6/27/2011
That was a great story! Well done.
odiejae chapter 1 . 6/24/2011
omg, i loved it! so incredibly hot! you should be proud, you did an amazing job!
Elicullen26 chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
LOved it! So intense and different.

You must defininitely should write more vampslash/slash!

Thx for sharing!
heygirl18 chapter 1 . 6/20/2011
That was hot!

I would say poor Alice ... but who cares when those two got together ;)
dlb2546 chapter 1 . 6/16/2011
That was incredibly hot! You should really think about expanding this to a full story. I'm still a bit confused as to why and when the family separated. But all in all, this was beautifully written.
amused-cat23 chapter 1 . 6/16/2011
This was good once things became a bit clearer. It was slightly confusing.
theswandive chapter 1 . 6/10/2011
Whew! That was hot, and crazy, and awesome! I read your A/N and said "is she on crack?" You did an amazing job, especially with it being your first time and all. ;-) Bravo! And good luck!
Leona Bowman chapter 1 . 6/9/2011
That was Fantastic. You did a excellent job.. That was beautifull but sad at the same time.. But why did Carlisle leave Edward that was his son? that makes me sad.. :)Leona
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