|Reviews for Bite Me|
| Crimefire chapter 1 . 11/15/2011
Anyway.. I think this was really badly written...
| Rooz990 chapter 1 . 6/9/2011
| Luna-sss chapter 1 . 6/8/2011
Aw so detailless oh well
| Ever December chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
I didn't take the time to look at your profile and see your age or whatever, but I feel the story was almost... immature? It was choppy, disorganised and felt a little forced. Maybe you just need to read more, or practice writing? You're lacking in the basics of literature ouline, and there are couple places where you've mixed up words.
It was also a little out of character for both of the boys, I know it's a one shot, and you're not the only author to have written someone off the mark, but maybe reading the books or even more fanfics would be beneficial. Don't stop writing, just, keep realising your weaknesses and improving on them. I'm not slamming you, really, I'm just offering as much helpful criticism as I can.
p.s. - have you considered finding a beta?
| Krucksue chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
Decent first shot...keep writing
| Mikado Tora chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
I think it's not a bad story, although I believe the rating should be T not M
| Lynette Serina Jones Harkness chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
am not sure if this story rading is correct i think is more of a rade T that M but it was good
| Jasmin chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
you spelt my name wrong. My bestfriend spelt my name wrong, wtf
Btw it was pretty fcuken awesomee your really good at right crude sex scenes without it being well crude weird i know but awesomee
| Haiku's of a lonely soul chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
hey Sherri very nice but i suggest you DONT skip the sex scene but outer wise i am generally pleased.