Reviews for The Midnight Masque
definatleynotafelineorcephalod chapter 10 . 8/7/2011
This was pretty nice. I like how you give people so much development, even when they aren't especially relevant to the plot. It makes your story seem that much more, I dunno, real. Just putting ordinary people with ordinary problems in a story filled with princesses and dragon riders. I must admit though, when I saw the line about the blue egg... Well, I may have thought that Eragon had taken to cross-dressing, and that Ceri was Eragon's Jude. Then I realized that that theory was completely ridiculous, and had to re-read the line to make sure. XD

I regret to say that I won't be able to read your next chapter, because I'm also going of of town on Tuesday, only for two weeks. Just means more chapters when I get back, though!
definatleynotafelineorcephalod chapter 9 . 8/2/2011
And here I thought I saw a story line... of course, this might actually be relevant. Perhaps the box(or the nothing inside the box) will become a Chekhov's Gun. Maybe. We'll see.

I do like the ending though. It just shows how much Galbatorix loves screwing with Murtagh's head. Although it does raise the question as to who was running the war effort before Thorn hatched... Durza? he was the one who had control of the Urgals.

I love this story though. Just the entire writing style, and the way you characterize the King,Murtagh, and Arya(and that little glimpse of Nasuada was pretty spot on as well). This reads a bit like a a Grimm's fairy tale gone horribly wrong- or horribly right, if you take into account that the original stories were awfully gory, and intended to be used as horror stories for adults.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 9 . 7/27/2011
This part left me absolutely curious... and a bit fearful... Great wording...

Murtagh sighed. He picked up the letter again. A final word – a threat, far from hollow, casually referred to. If Murtagh did not arrive on time, he would expect to hear the signal.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 8 . 7/22/2011
Short chapter with an interesting touch...

If you hadn't spelled its purpose out to me I would have never got it... {so thanks.} XD

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About last chapter's A/N...

Please announce when you have the early chapters reposted, so I can go back and re-read them.
Witchy Pixie chapter 1 . 7/14/2011
Hey it's AngelasApprentice from IF...i wanted to get this on my alerts/faves on here.

Most of my crap is posted here, rather than IF, so check it out if you've a mind.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 6 . 7/7/2011
You know... I am starting to wonder whether or not this is really happening, or whether it is all part of a waking dream.

Restrained.Freedom chapter 5 . 6/16/2011
I loved the feel of this chapter... all of it inside the elf princess' head.

Her lot is almost as depressing as Murtagh and Thorn's... almost...

As long it takes, I hope you do continue this story... me likes it much.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 4 . 6/10/2011
:o I have to apologize. My last review was a bit of a typo, it was meant to say the following...

"The images were so unexpected that I couldn't imagine what you were going to do."

:P My bad.


Posting the part about "Murtagh in disguise" at the front of the chapter might have made this easier to comprehend.. XP

I made myself sick trying to figure out when they entered the same environment, or whether one was scrying the others... To be honest though, if I had gone back and re read the previous couple chapters, it might... MIGHT have been more obvious. But when reading twenty different "fic" chapter for different stories in between, it helps to have a reminder up front.

Anyways... All is good. XD
Restrained.Freedom chapter 3 . 6/7/2011
*Blink, blink...* Arya, off on her daily morning of Faolin?...

*Blink, blink...* A careless ruby hunter causes her to flee?...

*Blink, blink...* Murtagh in disguise walks in philosophic contemplation?...

These images are so unimagined, that I need to know where they are going...

Write more please.

Guest chapter 2 . 6/6/2011
It's all good... I am damn near jealous of you

I like the fact that you didn't go with the whole gloom and doom throne room and chose a more regal taste even if it is considered bland; though nice touch on the red rug.

Galbatorix is a fun guy to portray, for you can be given endless amount of freedom exploring and creating his character

However, I like how you made Thorn more simplistic and Murtagh's feelings on terms of Dragons was more neutral, even if he considered Thorn a moron.

And that's okay if it is slow, and as long as you do not go entirely crazy, I am sure we are all going to be happy campers.
TheLunyOne chapter 2 . 6/5/2011
Wow. That was two full chapters chocked only with random thoughts and feelings.

Amazing, I wish I had your mad skills with twisting and bending words- you, my child, have a dark gift. The metaphors, similes and just the way all the thoughts and feelings are bent into mad tendrils and splicing patterns. I swear, I loved it, but it was a bit hard to follow and it gave me a headache. xD

I really like it, but if you don't get some dialogue in there, your readers will go insane. It's like listening to someone's thoughts for ten minutes, it's really cool that you can understand thoughts and emotions so well, but you need to get some more action and dialogue in their to keep the readers going, to get the suspense going.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 2 . 6/4/2011
Wow... You sure stretched the envelope with characterization with M&T.

I am still with you {tentatively anyways} and will continue reading, but I am just feeling a bit of caution.

Must say though, the opening where you draw us in to the life of Thorn's breakfast, is a bit of dirty pool... Like raising a bunny rabbit, only to find out as it is beheaded, that all your care is lost in the course of a single meal. Sad really, but a wonderfully creative way to shake the reader... Poor Nat.
Restrained.Freedom chapter 1 . 6/4/2011
I tried to read this several times when you first posted it and I was so lost that I lost interest...

When I saw the second chapter was up, I thought... try it again...

This time I was surprised to have my inner eye open enough to catch a glimpse of Galby's insanity. I can't say I have all the pieces figured perfectly, but just having broken the code {so to speak} I am delving into this fiction with enthusiasm.

The strangeness feels like being inside the madman's head.

WhiteWinterStar chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
Interesting enough...I will keep reading!

Though I wonder where you are going with this...
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