Reviews for When Night Falls
Guest chapter 66 . 5/17/2016
This is the first fan fiction I have ever read and I must say, your ability to nail the character personalities (for Rex, Asokah, Cad Bane, and Todo) along with introducing new characters (Derek and Britani) was nothing short of remarkable. This story was like reading a professional book only you took the time to add nice little details for us Star Wars nerds like explaining some of the capabilities of the CR70 and elaborating on the weapons many of the characters use. I must admit, I was very skeptical about "fan fiction " to begin with - some of the stories friends have shared with me were less than stellar. But this was exceptional, really. I felt like it was just an extension of the Clone Wars mini-series, and aside from the occasional typo (which can easily be excused), I have no complaints - other than wishing there were more chapters to read!
ricca chapter 66 . 3/16/2016
Oh wow. This was an amazing journey that I chewed through in 3 days and definitely missed sleep over. I loved your Cad Bane and your OCs were realistic and touching and of course the main pairing was everything I wanted. Slow burn and sincere believable realizations of mutual respect and adoration. Thanks so much for the experience.
Naasade-Jurkadir-Mando-Dalase chapter 49 . 4/10/2015
Was Bane's station inspired by Space Station Deep Space Nine from Star Trek, by any chance? It's just the first layout that popped into my head when I read the description, so I'm curious. :)
LegendaryOutcast chapter 66 . 4/9/2015
ok first off your work is amazing, i know that you put a lot of time into writing it and it shows. i really do like what you did with rex and ahsoka, like most couples they have very different personalities and are certainly not to jump into romantic relationship at the drop of a hat so the pacing of it was pleasant.

what i do love most here is cad bane, the concept of being a outlaw or a rogue has been way to heavily romanticized for my taste, and seeing a halfway realistic outlaw is what really drew me to the show, this guy doesn't do what he does because he wants to be king of the galaxy nor does he even want to be admired like a hero. he is just a guy who survives the best way he can, that being said i really like what you have done here. its not glorious or glamorous its just getting by while being hated by (Basically) everyone. keep up the great work
Guest chapter 37 . 12/11/2014
*Shivers at confrontation with the "beast.*"
of all monsters/creautres why did it have to be a spider not to mention Huge one.
Fafnirsage chapter 29 . 11/22/2014
Damn. This is an amazing look at a Clone's reaction to Sidius Palpatine. Simply Excellent. Loved the tension and developments. I like Derek's POV and how he talked about Rex-Very believable.
Guest chapter 14 . 9/30/2014
Who is more foolish The fool or the fool follow the fool
Chilli chapter 43 . 9/21/2014
AWESOME STORY LUV IT!I'm a Christian too
Ale chapter 66 . 8/6/2014
That was a very good story, I do have to say that I enjoyed it a lot :)

I felt like you did a good job of portraying the characters in a way that felt close to their canonical portrayals (within the boundaries of the circumstances of the story of course).

I liked how the relationships between the characters (all of them) evolved throughout the story. None of the characters was stagnant, and they all grew as a result of the occurances within the story.

I enjoyed Rex and Ahsoka's romance. Which is kinda weird for me since I don't particularly care for them as a couple or jedi romances in general. Still, I enjoyed how they grew into the relationship. It felt very real and very natural. It wasn't forced at all, and I suppose that has a lot to do with why I liked it :)

Derik...poor Derik :( I was sad that Britani died, but it did emphasize that part of the parallel between Derik and Anakin (which I totally didn't notice until Obi-Wan pointed it out...bad me). Derik really got the short end of the stick here, but it did help to make him a more sympathetic character. It kinda sucks that it was his own actions that led to her death (since we did find out that Bane had changed his mind or at least was actually considering not turning them in). But at least he'll never know that. Knowing that would probably have devastated the poor guy.

Still on the jedis, I'm surprised that Obi-Wan was the only other jedi that they found in six months unless they all kept dying? I did like them getting the chance to talk to Obi-Wan, though.

As for Cad Bane, I'm kinda sad that he gave his droid away, but I did like the interactions between Todo and Ahsoka. I do agree that Bane mistreats his droid, but I always kinda felt that their interactions kinda worked...if that makes any sense at all.
Still on Bane, other than the giving away of the droid, I kinda liked his ending. I probably would have liked a bit more (plus he was very generous there, like woah. But it is the price for peace of mind :P). I liked how he was annoyed at the jedi not being able to save their own selves and so he felt inclined to interfere on their behalf. I wonder if seeing Todo restored had anything to do with that, or if it was solely based on his and Ahsoka's interactions? I expected the jedi and bounty hunter to part ways, so there was no surprise there. I liked the semi-cryptic message he gave at the end. It was just cryptic enough to keep them suspicious and wondering just how much was planned from the beginning.

So yeah, I overall enjoyed this story a lot. Thank you very much for writing it.
I'm sorry that I couldn't give better reviews, but I tried to express at least a little how much I enjoyed the story. I hope it comes through :)

Thanks again!
Ale chapter 54 . 8/6/2014
Popping in to give another review :)

Again, I'm really enjoying everything you've done with this story. I can't imagine having to read it as it came out, though. It would be too many cliff hangers for my poor heart haha.

Anyway, I liked Ahsoka's breakthrough with Bane. In particular, I liked that her friends and Rex were able to help her out.

I kinda find it ironic that now that Bane finally has some (tiny) measure of trust for them (just Ahsoka), now she (and the others) have completely lost what little trust they had for him.

And I can't help but have a hollow feeling that everything is going to be going very wrong from this point on :( I am really REALLY hoping for a happy ending (for all of them preferably!), but I'm not sure if it's possible :( And I'm not sure if that's what you (the author) have in mind. I can only keep reading and hoping for the best.

I'm pretty hopeful that Ahsoka and Rex will have some sort of happy ending (I'm looking for the confession, but it's pretty expected at this point). I do have to say that I loved their slowly built relationship.
The OCs will likely have a happy ending too, but I can see things possibly going badly for Derik especially after the cliffhanger this chapter. I like the two OCs and I would like to read a happy ending for them as well.
And (as I said last review) Cad Bane is one of my favorite characters, and I would like for him to at least have a not-unhappy ending. And I like his interactions with his droid. I bet he'll be happier that his droid is back to normal, but he's smart enough to realize that it may have given him away. Then again, Derek might not give him the chance to realize it :(

So yeah...going into the next chapter fingers crossed and hoping for the best.
The Force wanted it to happen, so it must turn out ok...right? Right? (in denial)

Thanks again for writing this awesome story! :)
Ale chapter 35 . 8/3/2014
Oh yeah, one more thing I wanted to say.

I really liked the way you wrote the denial bits from Cad Bane's pov (if that makes sense). How you use the short choppy sentences. Little quick statements of a fact followed by another really short statement convincing himself that his last statement WAS a fact.

It makes it obvious (to the reader) that there is something more going on there.

Anyway, I wanted to make sure I expressed my appreciation of your writing style, especially those little parts :)
Ale chapter 35 . 8/3/2014
I wanted to pause here to review. Sorry if it isn't super lengthy or in depth, but I really want to keep on reading :P

First of all, this is an excellent, AMAZING story so far imo. I really like all of the character development and the fact that you actually pay attention to all of the characters.

I know the characters are going through extreme situations which makes them obviously have to do things that they otherwise would not do, but everything feels very in character so far.

I am most curious about where Cad Bane's story will go from here. I didn't/don't really want him to stay a villain, but it wouldn't surprise me at all. I found this to be an interesting twist. It seems like everyone ignores the jedi mind trick thing. I guess because it's a kid show and they don't want anyone to think badly of the jedis, plus Bane is a villain, but still :P
Anyway, I'm most interested to see where you will go from here. Cad is one of my favorites, and I'm enjoying the way that you are writing him, especially all the crude commentary haha. But I do like the other three the way that you wrote them. I'm enjoying Rex and Ahsoka's slow build into a relationship. I find it very cute. I'm even enjoying your OC which is pretty rare for me :) I hope he can safely reunite with Britani.
In fact, I'm hoping for a 'happy' ending for all of them. At the same time, I'm not really expecting it, but it would be nice :P

Thank you for writing this story. I plan on reviewing again once I make it to the end, but I'm a slow reader, so it might be a while. (It took me about a week to get this far)
Ale chapter 1 . 7/24/2014
Nice intro! It sounds exactly like the opening to one of their episodes. I'm excited to read where you go from here.
DazzlingCandiceBiscuit chapter 1 . 7/16/2014
Just reading this first part makes me want to see what's ahead. It sounds very interesting and it sounds epic. I can't wait to read it! :)
theLadyCheshire chapter 66 . 7/15/2014
i most enjoyed your story! i have had similar ideas about the faults and failings inherent in the Jedi Code, but your theories, ideological as they may be, made much more sense to me than the more traditional views of the Order.
Britani was a rather interesting character. as the martyr type, i can see why you characterized her the way you did (and maybe this was addressed in your other fics) but she seemed just a bit too perfect in my view, despite her 'weakness' in the Force.
i was fascinated by her views of "the will of the Force". as a life-long fellow christian, i recognized many of Britani's ideas and even phrases used. i have rarely seen the parallels between God and the Force laid out as clearly as your depiction, and i thank you for reminding me to look for Him in unusual places.
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