Reviews for Youkaigakure |
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![]() ![]() ![]() "tell anyone before my trial"?... The trial, and sentencing has already been DONE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey love the story so far the whole banshee thing actually makes sakura use unlike canon also the vampire sasuke is funny to me seeing how he drinks blood any chance he gets. My favorite though is how you combined two of my absolute favorite girl characters Mizore Shirayuki and Hinata Hyuga or Hyoga in this story. As for the harem question I love reading harem stories but fine with just one pairing and this hinata has my vote then sakura and a toss up for third with yakumo and ino. Though I am a little sad hinata wasn't sent on this mission because I would have loved to see her demon ice techniques vs haku's hyoton. Can't wait til the next chapter and keep up the good work bye. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wait, shouldn't DANZO have died too? Or the uchihas for that matter? It was anti-traitor, as in ALL of them, with those two's plans, even the butt monkeys working for Fugaku, it would have KILLED the butt monkeys at least because they are placing their loyalty FIRST to him. So that MAKES THEM TRAITORS and they would have fallen DEAD.. see the logic? Also Danzo with root... He makes them swear loyalty to him first.. SO he IS IN FACT a traitor himself, thus DEAD. Don't go half-assed with demons. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Definitely voting for harem, since that way Naruto won't need to choose between people he cares about. Amazing job on this story, by the way. Can't wait to see what's next! |
![]() ![]() Love this story can't wait for an update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This book is awesome! I like how Kyuubi/ Lelouch K. Lamperouge died, though I feel he might have had some use. And good job with the Geass ( kingly power ) spreading out to any kid younger than 9. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this! Please update! :D Also, for Naruto's mate: -Please no Harem, I can't really stand them. I don't know why, cause I'm not biased, but I just don't like them. I know you you can't base your story off my opinion, but since you asked, I figured I'd give it. -Also, for Naruto's mate, maybe none of the girls you've introduced, but a new one/different one who doesn't already have their eyes set on Naruto. I figure since your idea is really original (as far as I can tell because I've yet to read a story like this) to keep it that way, instead of going with one of his fangirls (including Hinata). Anyway, can't wait to read more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is truly very interesting to read; please update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please update and make it the Sakura, Hinata, Ino, and Yakumo harem. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think that you should have the harem because it would be better then one or two girls |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy fuck, I did not see that one coming! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Go with the harem, it would make more sense due to his demon nature, conditionally I'd go with the extra girl as well, as long as she isn't a Konoha Nin it would be okay. But it's your story, do it the way you want. Great chapter, Can't wait for more. dragonsong2795 |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know it took a ludicrous amount of time for me to get to this, but if it still matters, I vote fervently -against- the harem option. I don't like them to begin with, personally, but besides that, there is this: A normal romance subplot can safely happen on the sidelines without really making an impact on the overall enjoyment of a story even -if- the readers don't necessarily agree with the pairing(which I encounter a lot). From what I've seen of harem fics, though, even the most sparse and basic(and by extension, pointless) efforts end up sucking a lot of time away from everything else. Every new character added into any given harem means more time and effort -not- being spent on other, likely more important, parts of the story. Honestly(though this is a bit more personal again), they usually end up feeling like a cheap, shallow, and unsatisfying way to resolve the decision of a love interest. Harems certainly -can- be done well, but I mean, even then, it's even -more- time and effort being taken up by something that isn't really necessary -or- worth the effort. Yeah, I had a little something to get off my chest on that. Bloody f*** but this fandom's too obsessed with f***ing harems! That should do it. Moving on! I'm sorry if I went into too much of a rant on that and I'm sorry that it took such a direct question to get me to review(again? I think again) but I'll talk about the actual chapter now, though I'm afraid I don't have nearly as much to say. You skimmed over the "Demon of the bloody mist" explanation too much(I know we've all got the little story memorized by now, but it was -really- glaring how much you didn't even care about that part) and I can't for the life of me remember why vamps should be so terrified of everyday water(meaning that you may want to assume that your readers are a bit stupid and inattentive, a problem I've seen a -lot-) but besides those two(admittedly big) sticking points, it's quite a solid chapter. I don't think I've ever seen quite this particular approach on the arc before, and besides the fact that I have to resist the urge to start on my -own- half-baked Naruto fic idea -just- because the chapter gave me a great idea for my own version of the Wave Arc(fill it with Trigun references only in part by having Naruto "Love and Peace!" his way through the entire thing in a total cakewalk), I daresay I'm almost looking forward to more of the arc(No offense, seriously, but it -is- the Wave Arc). A few too many stories use Wave as a longer, bloodier version of the Familiar of Zero "Guiche Fight"(an easily-avoidable canon event that fic authors use anyway to showcase their new/different characters' abilities - though the concept's been around for Naruto a lot longer, of course) instead of just taking the changes(usually via empowerment) at face value and accepting that Zabuza's either kind of an idiot or likes to play with his food too much(you've implied both). . . . huh, so I had quite a decent bit to say, after all, even if about half of it was parenthetical. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes to the harem. This way the girls get to be with him update soon |