|Reviews for Fleeting|
| Sunruner chapter 1 . 7/25/2011
Ah, I love how that repetition is played with *just* enough to let the reader think he's deluding himself, without committing too far one way or the other.
The romantic elements in the second part are also nicely done, just enough description, little hints of sensation and emotion. And it's all subtle, very quiet as you read "breathless" laughter, "whispers" in the dark, butterflies: all distractions, very nicely done.
I even enjoy how you bring a sense of frustration into things with the Alchemy Machines. He's annoyed that his plans are stalled, but is that *really* the only thing bothering him?
Very good, D
| MixItUp chapter 1 . 6/17/2011
Wow. That was...really more poetic than prosaic, with the repetition of the opening phrase. I really like this.
| Mystics Apprentice chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Ah, short but sweet. I love finding fanfics like these with Alex and Veriti, only they're never long enough to satisfy me ;)
Great job, you wrote this piece rather well.