|Reviews for TG: Kiss the girl|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/15/2013
You don't need to improve. You're fucking amazing! More please!
| Homestucker413 chapter 1 . 8/21/2012
Let them make out
Let them god dammit :[
In all seriousness though, this was so incredibly cute! Great job!
| Homestucker chapter 1 . 6/25/2012
good, but REALLY needs to be longer. very cute and well done!
| gloomySandwichgirl chapter 1 . 4/15/2012
I laughed so much at Bro! XD Good job! super cute! :)
| starri ari chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
this is adorable. SO ADORABLE.
also, I know the picture you're talking about.
| Poolz chapter 1 . 9/12/2011
3 So cute
| aestheticisms chapter 1 . 7/30/2011
Okay, this is in fact the most wonderful short Jade/Dave fic ever. Dave's Bro is the best. Except, not really, when coming in between LOVE AND ROMANCE.
Oh God, snark. This is awesome. :D
| primarily chapter 1 . 6/9/2011
Cute! I liked that image, too. :-)
| Farla chapter 1 . 6/7/2011
Chat format and the spelling/grammar things caused by the typing quirks are banned on this site. You should consider posting on Archive of our Own, because sooner or later someone's going to go through deleting these.
Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it."
This fic...it's short, but even still, it feels too long. The bit with Bro is clever, but you spend most of the fic just leading up to that. It's not needed. Really, you could have started it just at them deciding to kiss.